by BigBird74
36.
Our drive back to the hotel started out in
complete silence. The manageress drove carelessly, obviously angry that I had
been silly enough to leave the hotel, something she clearly had not considered
likely. Her sharp, disjointed handling of the gear stick conveyed a sense of
profound irritation. Not once did she look at me or even attempt to start a
conversation. For my part, I was resolved to complete silence, unwilling to
test these shark-infested waters for fear of having my head bitten off.
Yet this day also showed me something
else. She cared. When I say cared, I do not mean in a loving or nurturing
sense, at least I did not suspect that. No, she cared in a way that an owner of
a proverbial golden goose might do to preserve their investment. That sense of
protection helped to soothe my strained nerves as I lay back in the passenger
seat of the car.
As we passed through the downtown and out
towards the edges of town where the hotel was located, the passing images began
to correspond with my own mental map. It was then I realised we were not going
to the hotel and was instead going to the other side of town. The easy calm
that had descended on me suddenly evaporated and my anxiety levels rose at a
steady clip.
It took me several moments to build up the
courage to ask where we were heading. I was not sure how she would react, but I
knew how to soften the impact. I spoke with the thickest accent I could muster:
“Miiiss. Where we headed? ‘Otel be thataway.”
The manageress’ lips curled upwards ever
so slightly and she remained silent. My courage duly crumbled and the sullen
silence overwhelmed any drive I might have had to continue asking. If it needed
any more underlining, that moment illustrated how certain people are just
comfortable with a dominant persona and others are not. Were some of us simply
born to rule and others to serve? That thought, careless though profound sent a
delicious erotic spasm through me, leading me to conclude that yes: I, at
least, was born to serve and not to rule.
We pulled up in front of a large, gated
complex about 20 minutes from the hotel. After keying in a code, the manageress
drove into an underground car park with a reserved spot. In silence we walked
to a side elevator and then travelled up a few storeys to what I presumed was
her apartment. I say presumed because this was not the apartment of a mid-level
manager of a second-tier hotel. This was approaching the status of a senior
manager: plush furnishings, all tiled floors.
Her heels clacked noisily on the gleaming
marble tiles. I followed after her, my eyes once more drawn to her legs and
shoes, adopting a naturally submissive stoop as I followed her. When the
manageress did finally deign to talk to me, it almost came out of the blue,
catching me off guard.
“You were stupid. You have forced me to
change my plans now. We cannot have you gallivanting about town as you wish.”
She spoke in short sentences, a staccato rat-a-tat kind of speech similar to a
mother telling off an errant child. Her next observation, brief and to the point,
caught me off guard.
“I am being promoted and will be moving to
New York. After this near debacle, I have decided you will come with me.” And,
just like that, my near future was decided for me in an instant. If I looked
shocked, it seemed to make very little difference. She walked away from me and
into the front room.
Her tone was authoritative and stern, “come.” All I could
do was follow, all traces of my will to resist left behind in that prison cell
downtown. I supposed she had read the situation perfectly and had seen my
confidence was in pieces. In that moment, my transformation from Katherine, one
of the richest heiresses in the land, to Marta, a penniless immigrant maid, was
almost completed. I felt such comfort in her protection. She had rescued me
from potential oblivion and unquestioned obedience now felt a natural extension
of this. Everything depended on her. I decided nothing any more.
Before the last two days, I had been
itching to find out more about ‘Katherine’ and how things had been evolving
there. In the darkness of the past 48 hours, I had lost track of everything. I
had felt so helpless. So powerless. Now as I reflected on that experience and
felt safe for the first time in days, I could also add to that list that I felt
…. on fire. As the manageress reclined on the edge of an expensive looking
leather sofa, totally unbidden I kneeled some ten yards from her.
“Good girl!” She purred. “You understand
much better now the hold I have over you. One phone call and you would be
ruined. Your only choice then would be to either keep up the charade and be
deported or face ridicule, humiliation and possibly jail.” She snapped her
finger and thumb and I crawled to her feet. I had witnessed this scene before,
in a few of the videos I used to watch online. Was it possible, she had too? My
phone browsing records probably made interesting reading for the manageress.
Right now though, as her fingers stroked my head and I kissed her feet, I was
burning up like a piece of kindling. My future completely in her hands and my
will to try to resist gone.
37.
The next few days could almost have been
considered a holiday for Marta, shorn as she was of her duties at the hotel. I
was not having her wandering off again and ruining my plans yet further. Once I
had the heiress busy worshipping my feet and legs, she was so erotically
charged I could have demanded almost anything from her. I had spent a few happy
hours wandering through the meandering lanes of her darkest desires. The time
spent perusing her browser history had proved eye opening. I had considered
myself reasonably experienced in the fetishes and play surrounding the BDSM
world, but even I was taken aback by some of the things I found buried in
there.
It was little surprise that the girl was
virtually in heaven as I secured onto her a pair of leg cuffs, chained a dozen
or so inches apart, with wrist cuffs similarly connected, both of which
restricted her movements to a swaying waddle. A collar containing a GPS tracker
completed the humiliating ensemble and removed all thoughts she may have had of
making a run for it. Not that she had anywhere to run to. Still the effect of
such props is typically huge and it was no different for Marta. A slave in her
own mind one moment and then, with the application of a few items, a slave in
actuality.
I saw how her body tremble and leak pure happiness as she was bound
up like a common slave.
Much had happened over the past few days.
Things I felt Marta should know about and things I resolved to keep from her at
any cost, at least until a moment of my choosing and profit. The news that we
were going to New York had started this latest wave of depravity in the rich
heiress. It had obviously shaken her and shown her again, if any emphasis were
now needed, that she had lost all ability to shape events herself. My
reassurances that everything would be okay calmed the poor thing’s nerves and
she was soon literally eating from hand. I explained how I had obtained a
promotion from Katherine Webb. The introduction of Katherine into the moment
had pushed Marta to begin stroking herself, her wet fingers now making a lewd
slurping and squelching noise as her excitement grew. She implored me to tell
her more about Katherine’s life now, finding the widening gap between what she
understood as Katherine’s life and what I was making it in reality to be
clearly intoxicating.
I threw her a few bones. The news that I
was to be Katherine’s assistant now almost sent the poor wench over the edge.
But a sharp tap on the nose pulled the little bitch back from the brink of an
orgasm. I had figured it would make it simpler to keep this charade going for a
bit longer, considering the other news I had not let onto. Whatever her current
delusions and lunacy, Marta was a smart girl with finely attuned senses and I
knew I must not let on that I was hiding anything from her. She was looking at
me in a way that I perceived to mean trouble, as though she could somehow tell
I was not telling her everything.
It was at that moment, I decided to
indulge her fantasy to the fullest and divert her attentions. “Of course. I
will need somewhere to stay while in New York. Katherine suggested I live in
her apartment.” I smiled knowing that this seemingly throwaway comment would
send Marta into raptures of pleasure. Her gasps of raw energy told me I had hit
the mark and I did not let go.
“Yes I will need a maid there. And. Well
she agreed I could use a hotel maid. I am not sure how long it will be for.
Katherine is out of the country right now and will not be back for a little
while yet. We may need to work on your disguise a little more…….” I paused.
Marta was climaxing on the floor in front of me. I slid a single foot to her
lips and she duly kissed and licked them.
Make no mistake: we were not lovers and
would never become so, though we were clearly hardening our relationship into
that of a Mistress and slave. Yet all plans unravel and I had already seen the
warning signals on the horizon. The move to New York was for two reasons: the
stated one of furthering my career and the unstated one of moving careers. Not
everything was happy in the Webb family corporation and I needed to protect
myself in the best possible manner. If I could pull this off while also
enjoying myself, what harm could there be in that?
This had been an interesting and promising story. It never found its focus or emotional core,but I had remained hopeful. With this instalment, it officially jumps the shark. So long, it was good to know you.
ReplyDeleteThis isn’t a defense of this particular story but a general comment. I don’t know if you write or not but these types of comments have no positive input... why write criticism when you can’t even be bothered to make any comments that would make a positive contribution. It is so easy to criticize. I am writing a story and it is bloody hard, there has been a plethora of comments about my plot but each helped shaped the story even more. We can’t make everyone happy. You probably have no idea the negative effect that comments such as your have.
DeleteNo idea what you mean by jumps the shark here.For me at least this story remains one of the best on this blog. I am sorry it's not to your liking, but have to agree with Andy that comments with no positive input can be very damaging. Not saying you can't criticize, but not if you just make snide remarks and don't bother to elaborate.
DeleteI'm rather surprised by the intensity of response to what seemed pretty tepid criticism. People will like some stories and dislike others, depending on their own tastes and expectations. When readers choose to comment. they will do so at the level of length and detail they decide. I don't think it's reasonable to expect every commenter to act as a literary coach. Personally, I feel that the most negative comments are the ones that are never posted. If someone bothers to comment, that's saying that the story reached that reader on some level.
DeleteEvery chapter of a story that is posted is like going up on stage and having the spotlight turned on. Inevitably, some of those watching will get up and walk out. I think knowing why they did so may be of some interest. However, as this blog approaches 2 million hits, it is certain that there are far more people who leave than stay and having tons of comments like that would be off-putting.
DeleteGoing off the deep end, as it were, is, I think, a common occurrence. It's hard to toe that thin line between believability and absurdity. Push the envelope too far and the whole thing collapses. I cannot say if such an event has transpired in this particular story as it has been some time has I first read it. I've been eagerly waiting for the conclusion and will restart from the beginning.
In conclusion, saying that you've gone too far is a perfectly valid criticism in my view. The way in which this critique was structured was perhaps mean-spirited (or may be viewed as such, depending on your inclination).
I can but only say it is a bit of erotic fun. I do try to retain some plausibility of course and try my best to deliver something that stretches the genre a little more. BigBird
DeleteI look forward to the enhancement of Marta’s disguise but more so her willing acceptance of such. Lovely continuation of Marta's continued Tottering on the brink but slowly progressing to a point of no return. I do hope Katherine’s sister will have a part to play at some stage sibling rivalry always a rich seam.
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Jackie J
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Hi Big Bird I love your writing but I do have some doubts about the “slave collar” I personally feel that an uncontrollable desire to be downgraded is somehow slightly more believable and more exciting, but I can’t wait for Marta’s Disguise to be taken even further, I hope you won’t mind my comments, also please please do continue the Annabelle/Zoe story on Changing Mirror, that is wonderful, so please don’t Leave your fans hanging!
ReplyDeleteYes the collar is just a prop for this moment. Having played games not totally dissimilar to this in my time, I find certain props add to the power of a moment. I can assure you it makes only a temporary appearance :) BigBird
DeleteI get the impression that the readers of this blog are a highly diverse group, as far as expectations, stylistic literary tastes, fetishes, willingness to suspend disbelief, and so on. I don't think any story is going to please everyone. Whatever we think of this current story from BigBird, I think everyone should respect the author for this gracious and well-considered response.
ReplyDeleteCan't agree more. Time and again I am surprised by what people here like or don't like. It almost seems random sometimes.
DeleteWhy don't you try doing a survey to find out? :p
DeleteYou've even got a newsletter you could make use of. I'm honestly surprised you haven't polled your audience to see what their interests are.
Do they like the setting to be in the present or do they prefer a period piece?
What is the ideal age for the protagonist?
Which parts of the Lady2Maid scenario do they most enjoy?
Should it be her choice or should it be forced upon her?
Do they like a race change?
Do they like stories that are clean or dirty?
Good idea! Will be interesting to see what elements get the most votes.
DeleteIt can be said that a lot of these stories start out relatively normal and then they devolve into some very extreme interpersonal relationships, where social demotion is turned into sexual slavery. That’s obviously not going to be everyone’s cup of tea. Working a crappy job may not be as titillating as becoming someone’s pet, but I’d like to see more stories where the villain is everyday society. It can be something as simple a boss cutting hours or rearranging the schedule, the dirty looks a poor person might get for using food stamps on nonessentials or having them run into an old friend from high school where they explain that they work a minimum wage job. They don’t necessarily have to worship her feet.
ReplyDeleteI for one still enjoy this story and hope to see new chapters soon :-)
ReplyDeleteHear hear!
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