by Noƫlle Lague
(Freely based on "Maid in China" by Barefoot Servant)
(Freely based on "Maid in China" by Barefoot Servant)
The next day
was going to be filled to the brim with duties for Maddie. She had to wake up
at five o´clock and was immediately told by Rosario to get dressed in her
cleaning uniform, the pink smock in thick nylon that she had been using
cleaning up after the guests. It made the serving uniform seem light and airy.
Just like the day before, she was to wear only the smock, without bra and
panties. The fact that it was worn without apron, for some reason, gave the
outfit an even more restrictive impression. Maddie felt her nipples attacked
with every movement, the stiff fabric was merciless. Rosario instructed her to
put the large white hairband in her hair to keep the it away from her face.
Maddie saw her reflection in a full-length mirror and groaned audibly.
”Yes Maddie,
that´s how Miss Heather wanted you to look for your cleaning chores today, that
is, for the moment. She wanted me to tell you that you later today have a
hairdresser`s appointment. You will be given a more appropriate haircut for the
maid you are, the lowest in rank.”
Maddie
squirmed feeling tears of anger welling up in her eyes.
”But….Mrs.
Dalaga….I….don´t want to cut my…..”, she complained but was cut off by Rosario.
”Enough of
your whining.”
She seized
Maddie´s arm and held it with a firm hand.
”Ow, you´re
hurting me….”
”Don´t you
contradict me again, Maddie,” Rosario barked.
”Ow….I´m……..ow….sorry,
Mrs. Dalaga.”
”If Miss
Heather wants to cut your hair, that´s what´s going to happen. Nobody is asking
for your opinion about anything around here girl, you are here simply to obey,
to clean and serve.”
”Yes, Mrs.
Dalaga, I´m so sorry.”
”You will be
put to work right now, Miss Heather insisted on having you do all of the
cleaning today, and - as I understand it - for the rest of the summer. So
that´s what you´re going to do, clean, Maddie. Or rather, learn to clean the
way Miss Heather wants the cleaning to be done, understand?”
”Yes, Mrs.
Dalaga.”
”Off you go.”
A swat to her
bum made Maddie start waddling submissively in front of Rosario toward a
morning of household chores, instructed by her superior maid.
Exhausted
from hours of sweeping, rubbing, swabbing, dusting and all imaginable cleaning
chores without break, Maddie was told to fetch a plastic bucket, a floor cloth
and a cleaning pad. Rosario would wait for her in the kitchen.
”Don´t forget
to put on your rubber boots”, Rosario added.
Maddie
hurried away. Once back Rosario directed her towards the toilets close to the
part of the house where the Kim family had their bedrooms. It was around eleven
o´clock. Maddie heard voices from the master bedrooms. She recognized Skye´s,
Heather´s and Jenny´s voices, but there was also a male voice. She was soon to
know who it belonged to.
Rosario
ordered Maddie to fill the bucket with hot water and stand at attention in
front of the toilets, with the bucket in one hand, the cloth and the pad in the
other.
”You just
wait there, yes, that´s right. Stand up straight, and stay like that”, Rosario
instructed before walking toward the bedrooms.
She knocked
at one of the doors.
”Yes?”. It
was Jenny´s alert voice.
”I have
Maddie ready for you now”, Rosario said.
Maddie heard
perfectly clear every word of the conversation.
”Just open
the door Rosario”, Jenny said.
Rosario did
as she was told. Maddie couldn´t see anybody, not even Rosario, as the corridor
that headed to the bedrooms was beyond the angle of the passage to the toilets.
But she heard the girls chat cheerfully and, after a moment, she could hear
their happy voices mix with the sound of their high heeled pumps as they walked
on the tiles. The clicking sound increased in intensity and
Maddie finally understood that they were approaching her and that she was to
greet her classmates in her utterly embarrassing and humiliating position, in
her degrading outfit in front of the toilets.
Maddie looked
straight ahead as she saw them, trying to hold back her tears. She was sweating
heavily and had begun to feel angry, her entire figure screaming submissive
indignation. She had to put an end to this awful humiliation, she thought. It
was outrageous and unfair.
Skye, Jenny
and Heather stopped when they discovered her, silently waiting for a reaction
from the poor girl. Feeling the irresistible power, the strong determination
that Heather possessed and the obvious authority she had exercised over her,
Maddie suddenly swung from anger to submissiveness. By constantly patronising
her, Heather had deprived Maddie of a good portion of her self-esteem. Jenny,
Skye and Heather, all three were her superiors, it was a simple matter of fact,
she should know that by now, she thought all of a sudden. Rosario had said so.
Drowning in humiliation, Maddie accused herself for being
not good enough, having signed a contract without carefully reading it, being
clumsy, having low grades and, looking down on her ridiculous pink outfit, she
finally lost control of her thoughts. Throwing a glance at her classmates and
Heather - all of them staring at her debased figure with derision - Maddie was
overwhelmed by their beauty and their self-confidence, and, at the same time,
her own wretchedness. I´m the maid of my classmates. I´m worthless. There was
only one thing left to do, that she could think of.
”Good morning,
Miss Jennifer, good morning Miss Branham, good morning Miss Heather”.
Maddie said
it with a facial expression that could be mistaken for cheerfulness, a weird
and slight distance in glaring contrast to the utter chastisement she was
actually subjected to. The girls felt Maddie was just trying to save faces, and
they were probably right. Heather adored it, the combination of Maddie´s
subdued appearance and her attempt to look unmoved or even amused, accentuated
Maddie´s state of degradation, making Maddie´s shame even more palpable.
The intensity of Maddie´s humiliation was in fact
unbearable and she had to search for anything that could give her the slightest
relief. The curtsy that accompanied her polite greeting was unusually deep, and
Maddie felt a wave of curious and ambiguous sensations invade her body, despite
her predicament. It certainly couldn´t be because of it. Or? She felt confused.
With all her power, she repressed what her mind was going through. Her
tormentors said nothing, they just savored Maddie´s distress.
”Miss
Heather”, Rosario interjected, ”is this how you wanted her this morning?”
”Yes,
Rosario.”
Heather
approached Maddie, correcting the position of her head, turning it slightly to
the side to face Jenny. Maddie, biting her lip, avoided eye-contact with her
classmate.
”Tell me, how
has she managed to perform the duties imposed on her this morning?” Heather
asked Rosario.
”I´m afraid
Maddie is having difficulties with most of her tasks, even the simplest rubbing
can cause her big trouble and I´m therefore obliged to monitor her every
movement.”
”Is that so,
Maddie?”
”Yes, Miss
Heather,” Maddie, meekly replied, glancing at her interrogator.
Skye
intervened.
”I have a
small request before you continue, Heather.”
”Please Skye,
go on.”
”I find
Maddie is holding her bucket too close to her body, I would suggest you tell
her to distance it a good bit. I´m sure it will make her more attentive to the
lesson she is given.”
”That is
definitely an excellent idea Skye,” Heather chuckled.
Maddie´s
pleading eyes met no reaction from Jenny, and she promptly, with a pained look
started to bring the bucket as far away from her body, as possible. As the
bucket was filled almost up to the top, she managed to change its position only
a tiny bit, but it was clear that she tried hard, her grimacing and panting
entertaining her onlookers greatly. Skye studied her disciplined rival
desperately struggling to keep the heavy bucket in position.
”That´s a
good girl, now you keep it that way, and don´t you spill a drop,” Heather
instructed.
”Maybe she
should also hold up her right hand, with the floor cloth and the cleaning pad
right aside her face?”, Skye proposed.
”Yes, that
will sharpen her attentiveness, go ahead Maddie, you heard what Miss Branham said”,
Heather bellowed.
”Yes, Miss
Heather.”
Maddie obeyed
and offered a ridiculous pose for her tormentors.
”Is it ok if
I continue with her Jenny?” Heather asked.
”Yes, please
do, Maddie seems to be particularly sensitive to your authority Heather, it can
only amplify her humiliation and consequently be beneficial for her obedience.”
”If there
were grades to be given for cleaning tasks Rosario, what grade would you give
Maddie?” Heather asked.
”Oh, I think
an F is adequate for Maddie,” Rosario answered looking sternly at the grimacing
victim, her bucket beginning to tilt from right to left.
”Maddie, what
does an F mean?”
”Failure, Miss
Heather”, Maddie answered, now heavily panting and squirming from side to side
with tears building up in her eyes.
Maddie was
having more and more trouble with the bucket.
”Good Maddie,
failure, that´s correct.”
The lesson
was far from being finished.
”You have
just been given an F Maddie, and I find that condign. Do you understand that
word Maddie?”
Heather was
crushing her completely.
”I….. don´t
know, Miss Heather,” Maddie said , barely audible.
”Speak up”,
Heather barked.
”Sorry Miss
Heather, no, I…. Miss Heather….maybe……. low?
The room was
filled with laughter, Maddie closed her eyes.
”Look at me
little one, it means deserved. Do you understand?”
”Yes, Miss
Heather”.
”Now, does
Maddie think she deserves an F?”
”Yes, Miss Heather.”
”Repeat the
whole sentence”.
Maddie obeyed
almost faltering, close to losing control over the bucket. Heather approached
her and corrected her arms, forcing the bucket into a higher position. Maddie
groaned helplessly, wincing.
”Thank you,
Rosario, for your opinion. And……what can you say about Maddie´s
attitude?”
”Maddie will
need strict guidance and to be kept in tight reins, at all times. She has been
whining about her tasks, even very simple ones and questioning my counseling
with childish protests, often beginning with the word but. She has also talked
without neither my permission nor any understandable reason, complaining about
how strenuous her chores are and explained to me what her favorite lemonades
are. Miss Jennifer told me that Maddie at several occasions interrupted Mr.
Buckley tuckering him out with stupid questions about anything and everything.
Maddie behaves like a cheeky little girl and requires - actually I sometimes
get the impression she´s almost craving it - the strictest possible
discipline.”
Rosario
looked again with a stern face at a mortified Maddie.
”Is this a
fair judgment of how you´ve been performing your tasks, Maddie?”
”Yes, Miss
Heather, I´m sorry”, Maddie answered, heavily panting, squirming almost
uncontrollably.
”Good,
Maddie, I knew you would admit your misconduct.”
Turning to
Rosario again Heather went forward in her interrogatory.
”Thank you,
Rosario for giving us all a good picture of Maddie´s unacceptable and stubborn
insolence. Maddie needs to be held under strict discipline and I´m sure you
will help me in all ways possible, won´t you?”
”Yes, Miss
Heather, I will be glad to do so.”
Now Jenny
intervened.
”Maddie´s
obligations in the household, as simple and tedious as they may appear to us,
will give her an excellent opportunity to show that she understands the importance
of her obedience. It is obvious that you Heather, have a decisive contribution
in this context.”
”Yes indeed,
Jenny. Having listened to Rosario´s description of Maddie´s behavior, her
impertinence and lack of respect for her betters, Maddie´s training calls for
stricter measures to correct her. Targeted actions, exercises without any other
objective than to improve her devotion and obedience, will be used to cope with
her misconduct.”
Maddie looked
with an anxious expression at Heather.
”To give you
an idea about what I mean Maddie will immediately be put through a series of
exercises. In fact, Skye´s idea with the bucket is a good example of what I´m
talking about.”
”Maddie, put
down the bucket and place the cloth and the pad on the floor. Hurry up.”
Maddie
quickly complied.
”Stand up
straight with your arms neatly by the side.”
Maddie
obeyed.
”Curtsy.”
”Turn your
head to the right.”
”To the
left”.
”To the
right”.
”Keep going
around your bucket and continue until I snap with my fingers, then stop.”
Maddie turned
around the bucket, lap after lap, in front of her amused spectators. Heather
eventually snapped with her fingers, Maddie froze.
”Look at me.”
”Turn your
back at us.”
”Turn your
head to the left”.
Maddie obeyed
blindly.
”Get down on
your knees.”
”Put your
hands on your head”.
”Stand up”
Heather´s orders
were given at a constantly accelerating pace. Maddie kept obeying
quickly.
”Turn to face
us.”
”Open your
mouth.”
Maddie made
big eyes, offering her tormentors a ridiculous sight, but complied.
”Open up
big.”
Maddie
groaned but, again, obeyed.
”Look at
Skye.”
Maddie, tears
flowing down her cheeks, obeyed and met Skye´s derisive look as she cheerfully
started playing with a pink bouncing ball. Skye let it bounce a couple of times
while slowly approaching Maddie, who was still keeping her mouth wide open and
her hands on her head. Then, abruptly and with a theatrical gesture, Skye
stopped the bouncing and held the ball in front of Maddie, close to her face.
With a few dance-like steps she went to stand behind Maddie, whispering in her
ear.
”Back-talking
servant girls must be silenced. Look at your friend Heather.”
Maddie obeyed
and moaned as Skye from behind and without effort slided the ball in between
her protruding lips, forcing Maddie to keep her mouth wide open, stopping
her from speaking.
”That´s a
good girl” Skye continued, ”you keep looking at your good friend Heather.”
”Arms along
your sides, Skye commanded her, Maddie did as she was told.
”Go stand in
the corner,” Heather barked.
Heather
directed her degraded victim to a corner close to the toilets, Maddie hurried
with her arms tight along her sides and took position with her face against the
wall.
”Hands on
your head.”
Maddie
obeyed. Heather had her completely under her thumb, perfectly docile.
”So Rosario,
what would be her grade in, let´s call the subject, for the sake of simplicity,
obedience, shall we?”
”Here too,
she gets a big F, Miss Heather,” Rosario answered with a beaming smile.
”Oh, there´s
another failure for our hero”, Skye teased.
”I think
Maddie´s both F:s are merited, justified and so perfectly fitting. Don´t you
think Skye?”, Jenny said smiling at her friend.
”Indeed,
Jenny. Maddie is an unbeatable loser, she should wear a sign on her chest with
a big ”F” followed by the word ”Loser”, Skye said smiling.
”I´m getting
hungry, and you Skye?”
”Yeah, let´s
leave Dumbo for a while”, Skye said.
”In a moment
Skye, we shouldn’t´t forget to organize the afternoon a little first”, Heather
interjected.
”Rosario,
when Maddie is done with the toilet cleaning she is to serve us lunch.”
”Yes, Miss Heather”,
Rosario answered.
”You will
thereafter prepare her for her big outing in town.”
”Yes, Miss
Heather, I have laid out the clothes you wanted her to wear on her bed and I
will supervise her as she gets dressed.”
”She will of
course wear her service uniform to begin with. Make sure we come in time for
her appointment with the hairdresser.”
”Yes of
course, Miss Heather, I understand how important it is for you.”
”Put her to
work, Rosario”, Heather ordered coldly.
With a shrill
voice Rosario ordered Maddie to get her bucket and speed up. Maddie quickly
lifted her cleaning gear and turned to one of the toilets and got down on her
knees, soaked the pad in the water and started to rub the WC.
She noticed
that the girls stayed for a minute to see her start cleaning, but soon heard them
leave for the pool. Maddie rubbed diligently, listening carefully to Rosario’s
instructions. Her movements were persistently corrected by the meticulous
woman. Maddie had come to a point where she stopped thinking about the
injustice of the treatment Heather imposed on her.
She now knew that being at the bottom of the social
ladder irrevocably had become her station in the Kim´s home. Along with the
self-contempt Maddie could feel for herself, she felt both admiration and
respect for her classmates and even for Heather although she hated her. They
were all three beautiful, clever and sure of themselves. And they obviously
wanted to put Maddie in place.
”Maddie, I
think someone is here to see you” Rosario said in a exaggeratedly tender voice,
giving Maddie a break in the continuous stream of admonitions.
Maddie stood
up and saw Graham looking at her.
”Oh, Maddie,
you really have to do the hard work in the Kim´s house, don´t you?”
Maddie
hesitated before answering, curtsying of course.
”Good morning
Mr. Buckley, yes …..I must do as I´m told, Heather wants me to work hard.”
”But that´s
good for you, Maddie, I´m glad to see you put in place. How could you ever
think I would accept to date you, Maddie?”
Maddie jerked
her head to the side at this intimidation, fighting against tears of
humiliation.
”You do
understand the absurdity of even thinking the thought?” Graham continued with a
stern look on his face.
Maddie looked
up, now reduced to tears.
”Yes, Mr.
Buckley….I´m ….sorry.”
”You should
be. Now get back to your chores”.
”Yes, Mr.
Buckley”, Maddie answered sobbing, with a curtsy, turning back to her
toilet, Graham to a moment at the pool with Jenny and Skye.
******************
With the
lunch approaching, Maddie followed Rosario to the maid´s quarter where she was
told to clean herself in the shower. In her light blue smock and bib apron she
then served her three hungry classmates lunch. Even Jenny was now picking at
Maddie constantly, dissatisfied with her performance, and, as Heather was
enjoying a bath, Skye was the one showing great pleasure in Maddie´s
discomfort, taunting her mercilessly throughout the meal.
”You must be
so proud of your new position at the Kim´s.”
Skye and
Graham chuckled.
”And, you
know, not everyone has gained access to the ”Special Unit””, Skye pronounced the
words Special Unit with a feigned puzzled expression. I don´t know, but it´s
probably a secret mission involved in what you learn there. Or……. wait a sec,
then why is it called the ”Dunce-house”?
Graham
laughed uncontrollably, Skye followed and finally Jenny burst out.
Maddie
struggled not to listen to her rival, but it became more and more difficult for
her, Skye continued relentlessly and didn´t stop until she was sure Maddie
couldn´t hold back her tears. Still Maddie had to continue serving her guests
and try her best to please them.
At a quarter
past one it was time to leave for the hairdresser. Maddie got permission to
have some of the leftovers. Standing at the counter in the kitchen, as there
was not much left of neither the hors d´oeuvre nor the main course, Maddie had
to content herself with some potatoes, bread and a glass of lukewarm
milk.
”Come with me,
Maddie,” Rosario instructed.
After a
curtsy Maddie followed behind Rosario to the maid´s quarter again.
”There,
Maddie”; Rosario said pointing at Maddie´s bed, ”your clothes for the
rendez-vous with the hairdresser. Take off your smock and get dressed.”
Maddie
hesitated.
”And faster
than that,” she barked.
”Yes, Mrs.
Dalaga…sorry.”
Maddie
speeded up her movements and hung her light blue smock on a hanger.
”You can keep
your underwear.”
Maddie was
wearing a pair of pink high waisted knickers in thick cotton.
”Pull them up
properly,” Rosario continued.
Maddie pulled
them up a little bit.
”I said
properly,” Rosario yelled.
Maddie all of
a sudden felt a strong anger explode in her.
”This is
ridiculous, I……..ouch..…your hurting me…..”, Maddie whined.
Rosario
pulled her ear.
”So you need
a little more stalwart persuasion huh?” Rosario scolded her, hardening her
grip.
”Owwww….no…sorry….”
Maddie wailed.
Rosario
released her and ceremonially pulled up the knickers in a ridiculously high
position on Maddie´s hip, almost giving her a wedgie.
”Now get
dressed you silly girl”.
”Yes…Mrs.
Dalaga….I´m sorry.”
Maddie lifted
the white Peter Pan blouse, put it on and started do up the buttons, the rest
of her ridiculous outfit waiting for her on the bed, a tartan jumper, a pink
crew neck cardigan, white knee socks, her white hairband and a pair of pink
Mary Jane´s.
”You will
stand in that corner when you´re finished, hands on your dumbhead, understand?”
”Yes, Mrs.
Dalaga”.
”I´ll go tell
Miss Heather about your insolence. I hope you will receive an appropriate
punishment immediately.”
Maddie got
dressed in her childish attire and quickly turned to stand in the corner as she
was told.
Maddie heard
someone coming, heels clicking loudly against the tiles.
”Come here,
Maddie.”
It was
Heather giving orders.
Maddie
instantly turned and moved toward Heather, hands still on her head.
”Put your
arms tight along the side and come closer, here, stand in front of me.”
Heather
commanded Maddie with a sharp but calm voice. Maddie obeyed blindly, panting.
Heather´s
expression was enigmatic. Relaxed but at the same time alert.
Maddie´s was
more simple. Her face screamed shame and fear.
Heather let
Maddie stand at attention, in complete silence. Maddie avoided eye contact with
her.
”Smack……ow…”
Heather had
slapped her in the face. Maddie looked like a statue, her beaten cheek facing
Heather. Eyes wide open in stupefaction.
The room
froze, Heather stared at her sister´s petrified classmate. With the index of
one hand she made Maddie face her again without any effort. This time Maddie
looked her in the eyes. You are hurting me, a voice in her protested, it´s not
just. But, as she looked into her eyes, feeling Heather´s self-evident
superiority, her irresistible strength, determined to crush her, she knew in
her heart that it was right. She deserved to be beaten by Heather. She looked
aside.
”Smack.”
One more.
Maddie froze, again leaving her slapped cheek exposed to her tormentor.
”Smack”
The third
resounding slap landing on Maddie´s cheek was followed by Heather violently
pulling Maddie´s ear.
”Ooowwww…”,
Maddie wailed from pain again, getting up on her toes to escape the pain,
grimacing.
”So, Maddie,
we are in need of more old-fashioned measures to discipline you, are we?”
”No,” Maddie
groaned, ”I´m sorry Miss Heather, ooowwww… I apologize…”
”You will
repeat after me little one; Maddie has been naughty and needs to be punished”,
Heather said, now raising her voice somewhat.
Maddie
repeated with a pained expression, still whimpering.
”That´s
better. Now thank me for slapping you.”
”Thank you
…ouch….Miss Heather for oww….slapping me.”
Heather
released Maddie from her grip.
”The outfit
you´re wearing is what Jenny wanted you to show off on your way to the
hairdresser. But since you have been behaving badly, talking back to Rosario,
obeying to your own irrelevant caprices instead of the orders given to you, I
proposed Jenny to discipline you further. You understand that´s what you need,
don´t you Maddie?”
”Yes, Miss
Heather”.
”You will
therefore be forced to wear even more humiliating clothing. Rosario, give her
the stuff I showed you.”
”Yes, Miss
Heather, right away”, Rosario answered and opened the cupboard, pulling out the
gear.
Maddie - in
her childish clothes - was helped by Rosario to put on the rainwear Heather had
chosen for her to wear. To begin with a high buttoned raincoat in thick rubber.
The long, bright red coat had a round collar, puff shoulders and was similar to
what Maddie remembered wearing as a child. It looked unbearably juvenile.
Rosario held it up for Maddie to put her arms in. The bib pants that followed
were even worse than the ones Maddie had gotten used to wear at the Unit, these
were extremely baggy, shocking yellow, with large shoulder straps and big push
buttons. The model was a perfect copy of Heather´s childhood rain bib pants,
even the color was exactly the same. Rosario took care of pulling them up and
over the coat, fastening the buttons on top of the shoulders and above the
armpits.
If this kind of rainwear is cute on little girls, they
give a completely different impression on a teenager, especially if it´s like
Maddie, a quite well-padded girl with ample bust and protruding seat. Rosario
helped her put on a pair of bright blue rubber mittens, surprisingly long,
finishing above the elbow. A matching blue sou’wester was carefully secured
under her chin. Finally, poor Maddie had to step into a pair of white rubber
boots. She looked like a traffic signal, absolutely silly.
Heather dragged her ridiculed underling in front of a
full-length mirror where Maddie was told to look at herself. She groaned.
”How do like
your new clothing, Maddie?”, Heather asked cruelly.
”I…. don´t
like it, Miss Heather,” Maddie said, curtsying.
”But you
think it´s good for you to wear it, don´t you, Maddie?”
”Yes, Miss
Heather”, Maddie obediently answered, tears now flowing, curtsying again.
Maddie was
made to repeat the whole phrase, curtsying, drowning in humiliation; ”It´s good
for me to wear my new rainwear.”
She was ready
for her first outing, Heather inspected her outfit, correcting the shoulder
straps. Rosario smiled as Maddie was made to walk around in circles in the
room. The rustling noise was unbelievably loud and of course added to Maddie´s
discomfort. She was eventually told to stop and stand at attention again.
Heather and
Rosario laughed hard at poor Maddie who stood crying in her shapeless, rustling
attire.
”It really
makes you look what you are Maddie, can you guess what I´m thinking of?”
”No, Miss
Heather”, Maddie answered curtsying.
”A dumb silly
girl, Maddie. That´s what you are. Let us hear you say it.”
”I´m a dumb
silly girl, Miss Heather,” Maddie repeated obediently.
”That´s right,
Maddie. Linda will love to see you in your fashionable rainwear. Come with me.”
A major part of the humiliation for Maddie, as created by Barefoot Servant, was for her to be forced to experience life as a barefoot maid. I wish that this story would remain more faithful to that vision.
ReplyDeleteThere's so little of the original plot or atmosphere here, it's hard to understand why the story is being presented as inspired by the other. This author seems to think the blog is called lady2rubberfetishist or lady2childabuser. But let's look on the positive side. It's supposed to be an 11 part story, so the end is near.
DeleteTo be honest, the maid aspect usually plays second fiddle to some other fetish in a lot of stories. You may forgive our hostess for publishing them anyways as there isn't an overabundance of ladies-in-waiting.
DeleteWhen I go to a seafood restaurant, I expect seafood on the menu. If I go and they tell me no seafood is available, but they have some nice beef, I won't get into a rage, but I'd say "I'll come back when you have seafood."
DeleteMaybe there aren't an overabundance of maid stories. That doesn't mean that accepting stories like this one is a good solution. It's just going to repel the kind of writer who might submit stories that are more on-topic and better written. It's like somebody who gets desperate and starts going out with anybody who asks her just so she won't be alone.
DeleteOn the other hand, if updates were few and far between then there wouldn't be as many visitors and the chance that one of them would contribute something decreases. It's a fine line keeping your audience engaged while not diluting your brand.
DeleteMaybe we can have a poll to see where people's interests lay. It may be that a lady becoming a maid is no particular interest. I would be content with other types of demotions such as executive to secretary.
I've heard jokes about stories that were meant to be read with one hand. This one reads like it was written with one hand.
ReplyDeleteI still enjoy alot this story and always happy when new episode is released! This was another fun part and all my thanks to the author!
ReplyDeleteWhere's Daphne and the White Apron? xo
ReplyDeleteI like the story but I dont understand the boots fetish part. If I remember in the original story and this one the maid are traditionally barefoot.
ReplyDeleteI'm afraid this story has lost me entirely. Is there any chance of an update on any of the far superior unfinished stories on here soon?
ReplyDeletePrevious Barefoot stroy was better. This is too long and does not fit here. Dressed in plastic etc. and she was never a lady but a half dumb girl. Another thing, beatiful women gaining weight is also very un-erotic. I hope this story will finish soon...
ReplyDeleteYou can't say that making a fit girl fat is not erotic because to some people it is. It's not really my thing either, but one of the most popular stories in this genre (Cleaner by Emma Finn) heavily features weight gain.
DeleteThe comments that this serial have generated are a lot more interesting and better-written than the story itself. I guess that just illustrates the old saying, "Nobody's life is useless. It can always serve as a bad example for others."
ReplyDeleteCant wait reading the next Part of the Story. I know some People dislike the Story, or think that other Stories are better. There is no Rule they have to read your Story. They may read other Stories and everything is ok for them. I hope you will go on with your Story....i really enjoy it !!!
ReplyDeleteDear Noƫlle Lague,
ReplyDeleteDon't listen to the naysayers. If the fetish scenarios in your story are not to someone's liking, so be it. At least you're putting your work out there! I wonder how many stories have been written by those who feel compelled to share their negative opinions. Not many, I'll bet! Don't let trolls discourage you. Keep writing!
~joea1000
Thanks for the support, the remaining two chapters will of course be put out, and yes, I´m pleased to announce that there´s not only a 11th but also a 12th chapter coming, for the pleasure of those who like my novel! With all my esteem for Camille Langtry who moderates this site with panache.
ReplyDeleteIn English, the appropriate response is, "The beatings will continue until morale improves."
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I think this story is amazing. The humiliation works fantastically for me, thanks for writing it. Great job, really well written.
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