Thursday, May 31, 2018

Story: The Secret Slave. Part 14.

Sorry for the long hiatus. Here's the next chapter of Sophie's long journey. Never have I felt such affinity for a character and it saddens me to see where this is headed. I honestly did try to go easy on her and to help her out - resulting in me dragging my feet for days and weeks - but the story just wrote itself, taking her to the point of no return.


by Camille Langtry

Sophie sat quietly in the corner of the covered wagon. Her hands were painfully tied behind her back, forcing her into an uncomfortable position on the narrow wooden bench. She had tried to protest as she was unceremoniously dragged by her captor, but her insistence that she was not a slave was summarily ignored.

"One more word from yer and I'd put this in yer mouth, girl," the younger of the slave catchers barked and showed her what looked like a rope gag, dark and gnawed from repeated use. "Is that clear?"

"Yes, suh. I be quiet suh," she replied, switching back to her negro slave talk without even thinking about it. Given the circumstances it seemed futile to convince them of her real identity. Neither did it seem particularly wise. Perhaps the best way out of her situation was just getting a hold of Miss Elizabeth, who would somehow solve this mess for her.


She listened attentively to what the two men were saying to each other and was relieved to discover that their plan was to deliver her to the sheriff in Augusta and claim a reward from her owners. That calmed her down just a little bit - at least they were not planning to take her very far and once they heard the news in Cypress Hill she’d be free in no time - or so she thought as she had no knowledge of what the procedure was for runaway slaves was, for this is who she was in the eyes of the law now. At the very least, it seemed logical to presume that they’d notify her owners first thing.

She shifted around on the rough bench, trying to find a comfortable position so that she could get at least some rest but it was no use: the road on which the creaking wagon was slowly moving was far from smooth and she could feel every little and not so little bump with her tired body. Still, Sophie closed her eyes and it was not long before the monotonous sound of the rumbling wheels put her in a state of an uneasy semi-sleep, the unyielding heat only adding to her drowsiness.

About three hours must had passed when the wagon stopped in a circular courtyard in front of the sheriff’s office. Sophie heard some commotion through the thin cloth wall and then a slow, drawling voice of a man.

“Well, well, well. I’ll be damned. We haven’t seen you in these parts for a long time, Doyle. You back in this fine business of yours, you old fella?”

“A man’s gotta feed the family, Sheriff Clark.  This business is no worse than any other,” Doyle - Sophie recognized the voice of the “President” - replied in a rather irritated manner.

“Easy there, Doyle. You know I mean no disrespect,’’ the Sheriff replied, drawling his words even more - it did seem that the two went way back and the memories were hardly pleasant for either of them. “You got anything good for me?”

“Bob, get her out, will ya?’’ Doyle ordered and a moment later the younger slave-catcher, “The Vice President”, jumped inside the wagon and dragged Sophie out.

The sheriff, a middle-aged man with a thin moustache on a disgruntled face, made a step toward her and sharply pulled Sophie’s collar closer so that he could read the inscription.

“A Cranstone girl? Isn’t this my lucky day?” he said and a sly smile crossed his rough face. “Hey, Murphy. Ride to Cypress Hill, boy, and tell Miss Caroline Cranstone that we got one of her slaves here. And tell her she better have all the papers in order this time, you understand? She’ll know what you’d be talking about.”

“Very well, sir,’’ a man standing behind the sheriff turned around and went toward the stables. Sophie, her eyes downcast, did not see his face, but his ringing voice sounded very young, like that of a boy barely out of puberty. 

“At least she was dumb enough to run away with a collar with her master’s name on it. Can you believe that?” The Sheriff turned to Doyle, even though he clearly did not expect his visitor to weigh in. “Well, makes my life so much easier. With niggers it takes a lot of work before they tell you the truth.”

Sophie’s cotton field experience gave her some idea what that “work” could entail and she was relieved that, by the sound of it, at the very least she should not be exposed to the treatment that was reserved for unidentified runaways.

“What’s your name, girl?” the Sheriff lifted Sophie’s chin.

“Sophie, massa,” she replied, adding the referential address. It just seemed natural to call any superior a “massa” even though the brutish man in front of her was most definitely not a member of the planters’ class. He seemed pleased by her apparent submissiveness.

“I can’t believe they’d sent a pretty little thing like you to the fields. Sounds like a waste, if you ask me. Someone with your looks should be doing something... a lot more pleasant if you know what I mean. Did you do anything to upset your masters?” the Sheriff inquired with genuine curiosity and even a small hint of fatherly pity in his voice. 

“Yes, suh. Ah burn Miz Caroline’s party dress, suh. Dat mek her real mad,’’ Sophie replied.

Doyle chuckled and interjected: “No more a high and mighty lady, are you? What happened to your father’s plantation? You can’t fool someone like me, I can always tell a slave when I see one. Even if they dress you up in fine clothing and teach you manners, you’d still be a slave.”

“This girl here told me she was a lady in disguise when we met here on the road,’’ Doyle explained to the Sheriff. “Doesn't look like she thinks it makes sense to continue with her stupid lies.”

The sheriff shook his head in disbelief: “A real lady? Her? With her deep tan she got working the fields and whip marks on her hands? And her slave talk? And the way she quivers when a white man addresses her? She must be thinking us blind and deaf. Did you really say you were a lady, Sophie?”

For a brief second she considered telling them the truth but the repercussions of doing that were too grave. If they believed her, her secret would get out, ruining her - and her family’s - reputation forever. And if they didn’t believe her, she could get punished for being a liar. She already tried it with Doyle and it only made things worse In a sense, she was now thankful he didn’t take her words seriously - it was better to carry on in her slave persona until Elizabeth - her mistress - could rescue her. Doing anything else would be reckless and could have far-reaching consequences, all of them damaging to her future. She bit her lip and answered.

“Sorry, suh. Ah lied when I say I wuz real lady. Ah jus’ iz da housemaid for ma missus. Ah jus’ got real scared, dat all,’’ Sophie replied in a meek voice of a slave waiting for her punishment, hating herself for betraying her real self. “Please don tell da missus dat, suh.”

“I’ll see about that,’’ he replied and turned to Doyle again. “Let me lock her up and then we can see about your reward, old fella.”

The Sheriff led Sophie, whose hands were still tied behind her back, across the yard to a long one-storey building with tiny barred windows - a jail. The cell was a narrow room with a creaky wooden floor and no furniture. It didn’t look like it had been washed or even dusted since the day it was built. It was empty now, but undecipherable scribblings on the walls and the stifling all-pervading smell of unwashed bodies and God knows what else was a clear reminder that it was used often. The Sheriff made a wry face as he inhaled the room’s air.

“How many times do I need to tell that idiot to clean the place? It stinks like a dead coyote,” he declared angrily and turned to Sophie. “I say what. You clean it for me, and I’d promise not to tell Miss Cranstone that you were making silly stories up.  Your Mistress still owes me from last time so she won’t be in the mood already, you don’t want her to get her all fired up even more. How’s that for a deal?”

Sophie bowed her head in agreement. It didn’t seem like it was really a question, more like an order a superior might give to his subordinate, expecting total obedience in return.

“Very well, it’s for your own benefit, you know. You’ll be spending the time here, not me!” he continued in his drawling voice as he untied Sophie’s hands.  “I’ll have Tom bring you a mop and some water. Make sure you clean it real well, girl. Believe me, you don’t want to disappoint me. Understood?”

Sophie bowed again, adding her semi-automatic “yessuh”. The Sheriff nodded his head and, without saying anything else, locked her in the tiny cell. Five minutes later the door was opened again and Tom, a bandy-legged old man with a vacant stare, brought a large bucket of water, a scrubbing brush and a mop, uttered something under his nose, and left Sophie to do the task she was assigned.

She got on her knees and began scrubbing the dusty floor that was covered by sticky brownish spots and stains. The filthy odor was unbearable and soon both her well-worn clothing and her hands became smelly and filthy. The onerous task reminded her once again of her status in the eyes of her captors or anyone else unaware of her real identity. It was inconceivable to imagine that in her life as a lady she could ever come across someone like Doyle or the Sheriff and, if she did, they’d treat her with utmost respect.

Now, however, she was nothing but private property to them, she could be ordered around and asked to do disgusting tasks like getting on her knees to clean someone else’s muck. Her opinion on the matter was completely irrelevant, she was expected to accept their orders with no reservation. The ease with which she fell into this enforced role scared her. With every additional hour as a slave it seemed more and more natural to her to just do as she was told. There was an undeniable and all-prevailing fear of being punished again - something she’d never experiences in her previous life, even as a child - and a creeping realization that completely submitting to someone else’s will was the best way to avoid more trouble.

She thought back to the slaves at Cypress Hill, their passivity and submissiveness no matter what new humiliation Caroline and her ilk came up with. Was she gradually becoming like Rosa or other gals at the plantation in the way she looked at things? Eager to please and take orders from the “white folks”? Accept them as her betters who were entitled to order her around? Her disturbing thoughts were interrupted by the sound of the door being unlocked. The Sheriff walked in and looked around the room.

“Now, that’s much better. Your Mistress won’t be here for a while. How about you clean the corridor and the other three cells too? Tom will feed you and then you can carry on with your work,’’ he stated bluntly, completely oblivious to the fact that Sophie was exhausted and her knees and back hurt from all the crawling and bending.

After a frugal meal consisting of lukewarm beans and a slice of stale bread, Sophie was given another bucket and led into a corridor which was blocked by an iron bar from a small office. Thankfully, it wasn’t nearly as dirty as her cell, but it was a lot longer and, she figured, would take her more time to finish. She got on her knees again and was soon lost in the mechanical task, doing her best to please the Sheriff with her performance as a cleaner. She was completely at his mercy and the last thing she needed was upsetting him in any way.

She had no way of knowing if enough time had passed for the messenger to reach her Mistress. Furthermore, what if she can’t come rescue her right away? What if she had to spend the night in this place? The Sheriff’s casual remark that Caroline “owed him from last time” also worried her. Could it complicate her situation even more? There was no way of knowing that, neither could she influence the events. Surely, it should be a simple enough procedure to deliver her back to her mistress? All she could do was wait and this complete uncertainty only added to her growing nervousness.
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When earlier that day the overseer told them that Sophie had vanished, Elizabeth was overcome by a morbid sense of dread. She nearly fainted but held herself in the saddle at the last moment. Her apparent nervousness did not go unnoticed by her cousin who turned to her and said with a little smirk on her pretty face: “Just an ordinary slave to you, huh? Don’t worry, your precious treasure will be found in no time. She’s not from here so she doesn’t know where to go. Even if paddy rollers don’t catch her first, my boys will. Jones, get the dogs, she couldn’t have gone too far.”

“Wait, Caroline, please. No dogs. She’s probably just lost her way somewhere. Why would she run away? It must be a big misunderstanding. Let’s just wait, I’m sure she’d come back herself,’’ Elizabeth protested weakly, but that only added to Caroline’s resolve.

“This surely doesn’t look like a misunderstanding to me,” Caroline said dryly. “Jones, you heard me. Don’t waste time. And make sure the dogs are on a long leash, I don’t want my cousin to get all upset if her slave has something important bitten off. Report to me the moment you have news.”

Jones nodded and motioned to two other overseers to follow him.

Caroline put spurs to her horse and rode off at full speed toward Cypress Hill. Elizabeth, tears in her eyes, followed. Elizabeth couldn’t help but ask herself why Sophie would do such a thing. What was she thinking? Couldn’t she have just waited a few more hours before her punishment was over? It just seemed so childish and irresponsible. Not only did she put her life in danger, but she also put their secret arrangement in jeopardy and, therefore, Elizabeth’s reputation and societal standing at risk! As much as she hated to admit it, perhaps there was something to Caroline’s insistence that the girl desperately needed guidance and discipline. Like a little child or, indeed, a clueless slave.

They got back to Cypress Hill in no time and Elizabeth rushed back to her room without saying another word to her cousin: she didn’t want Caroline to see her tear-stained face. Still dressed in her riding habit she collapsed on the bed, no longer trying to fight back her weeping. An image of Sophie, her friend, being chased by dogs filled her with panic and she could only pray that everything might somehow end well and she wouldn’t get hurt. She lost track of time as thoughts, each scarier than the next, circled her tired brain. After what seemed like an eternity she heard voices downstairs. She jumped to her feet and slowly opened the door, trying to listen in.

She heard the unfamiliar voice of a man and then Elizabeth’s irritated response: “Tell Sheriff Clark that he should not be concerned about papers. The word of a Cranstone is worth a lot more that a stack of them.”

“Very well, Miss,’’ the young voice responded.
“You can go back to Augusta now. I’ll come pick her up myself later today.”

Elizabeth quietly locked the door, breathing heavily. Thank Heavens, they'd found her!

She heard the front door shut and then footstep sounds on the stairs, followed by an insistent knock on the door. Elizabeth, trying to hold back her anticipation, opened. The mistress of the house was there in person to deliver the news.

“Oh, Elizabeth, don’t tell me you’ve been crying all this time,’’ Caroline declared in a somewhat irritated manner and looked her cousin straight in the tear-reddened eyes. “She’s now with the Sheriff in Augusta, waiting for you to pick her up.”

“This is wonderful news, Caroline. Can we come now?” Elizabeth exclaimed. “I am really worried about her. Is she all right?”

“She’s fine. Unless she does something stupid again. She does have certain discipline problems, as you are aware. Let’s hope she behaves herself with Sheriff Clark, he can be quite brutal with disobedient slaves I am told,’’ Caroline said uninterestedly. “Just grab your papers for her and we can go.”

“Papers?”

“Yes. Anything to prove your ownership rights. A bill of sale will do,’’ Caroline answered and paused, examining her cousin’s worried facial expression. “Wait. Don’t tell me you don’t have it!”

“I… I didn’t… I didn’t think I’d need it. I... left at home,’’ Elizabeth said quietly, her eyes cast downcast as if she was hoping that the nonexistent bill of sale for Sophie would somehow magically appears on the floor. “Can we get it sorted some other way?”

“I am not sure what you mean, Elizabeth. Of course you need to prove she’s your slave. She is, is she not? I don’t think the Sheriff will just release her with no papers. I can send someone to pick them up for you if you’d like. Will only be a couple of days,” Caroline said and gave Elizabeth a smile of a friend just trying to help.

“She can’t be there for two more days!” Elizabeth cried out as she desperately tried to come up with a plausible explanation. “I don’t remember where they are. I am not even sure they are at the plantation. I don’t remember when I last saw them!”

“That’s a pity then,’’ Caroline continued and smiled again as she delivered her final blow. “If you don’t have it the Sheriff will have no choice but to put her up for sale.”

“No, no, no! Isn’t there anything we can do?” Elizabeth’s eyes filled with tears again.

“I am not sure what you mean, Elizabeth. She’s your precious little slave, correct? It’s not my fault you are almost as irresponsible as your housemaid. Whenever I travel and have slaves with me, I always take their papers. Who knows what can happen?” Caroline lectured her crying cousin, clearly enjoying her power over her.

“Caroline, please! You have to help me!”

“Let’s send for the papers. We are just wasting time,” Caroline pressed on.

“I don’t have them!” Elizabeth broke down crying, wiping tears from her reddened face with both hands, and immediately regretted her honesty.

“Is that so? I don’t think that’s going to be good enough for Sheriff Clark. Off to auction block she goes,” Caroline turned around and reached for the door knob, ready to leave Elizabeth to her misery.

“You were almost right, Caroline,’’ Elizabeth suddenly said and quieted down. “She’s not just a slave to me. Will you help me please?”

“So, she is your sister,” Caroline declared triumphantly and added in excited semi-whisper as if anyone could hear them: “You papa’s illegitimate daughter?”

“No, Uncle Charles’s,’’ Elizabeth said, trying not to look Caroline in the eyes.

“Oh, that rascal! I should have known! He had quite a thing for pretty negras, did he not? Poor Aunt Polly, I don’t know how she could live with him.”

 “Please we have to help Sophie! She’s always been like family to me.”

“So, no papers for her? Nothing?” Caroline inquired again and after Elizabeth nodded her head no she continued: “Well, I think I might have something we can use.”

Caroline rushed to her study and soon returned with a few large envelopes, an inkwell and a quill. She took out a stack of papers from one of the envelopes and started going through it.

“Here it is. It’s perfect. Sookie. She died at childbirth last autumn, she was about same age as Sophie.” Caroline laid out the folded page on a small table cabinet. “K almost looks like an H here. Talk about bad handwriting. Let me see…”

She dipped the feather quill into the inkwell and added a very convincing tail to the second “o”, turning “a certain female negroe slave Sookie, of light complexion and about 18 years of age”, into Sophie, her twin in the eyes of the law. Like Sookie, Sophie, as well as “her future increase” was sold “for the use and benefit” of Caroline Cranstone and her heirs, warranted “sound in body and mind and slave for life”.

Pleased with herself, Caroline let the ink dry and handed the bill of sale to Elizabeth.

“I guess that makes Sophie my slave, at least as far as the Sheriff is concerned. I hope you don’t mind. I think it’s for the better if I do all the talking anyway,’’ she added. “We had a bit of a misunderstanding with him a few month ago with another runaway slave of mine. I believe he is under impression I owe him now. We’ll see about that.”

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Sophie, sweaty and exhausted, was on her fifth bucket when she heard the sound of horse hooves and creaking wheels. She rushed to the barred window of the cell she was cleaning and saw a familiar open carriage. It stopped by the porch and Caroline, a lacy parasol in her carefully-gloved hand, descended the short steps gracefully. She motioned for Elizabeth to remain in the carriage and headed to the main building.

Elizabeth turned around, her hands nervously clutching the carriage’s leather-bound backboard, and settled back into her seat after she saw no sign of Sophie. She’s most definitely somewhere inside, Elizabeth tried to calm herself. We’ll have it sorted and be on our way home. Caroline will see to that, she promised.

The Sheriff rose to his feet when he saw the beautiful mistress of Cypress Hill enter his little office.

“Good afternoon, Miss Cranstone.”

“Good afternoon, Sheriff Clark. I believe you have my slave Sophie. Let’s get all the formalities out of the way, shall we? I don’t have much time.”

“Show me the papers. I gather it Murphy told you gotta bring them this time? No more this “word of a Cranstone” rubbish, not after last time,’’ he said brusquely and took the folded bill of sale from Caroline.

“Well… You really paid just $250 for her? That’s quite a bargain. Someone like her could fetch $1,000 at the very least. $1,500 or $2,000 even!’’ the Sheriff inquired and continued inspecting the document suspiciously. “Why does it say her name is Sophie on top, but lower down it’s Sookie?”

Caroline cursed herself: in her haste she completely forgot that a slave’s name is often mentioned twice in a bill of sale - in the beginning and then closer to the end. She tried to salvage the situation and answered matter-of-factly: “You know how sometimes the slaves have two names. We’ve always called her Sophie, but her previous masters called her Sookie. I can’t be bothered with trivial things like that!”

The Sheriff did not answer and suspiciously raised the paper to the light.

“I’ll be damned. Don’t tell me you were trying to fool me again! Let me guess. Forging documents so that you don’t pay the right compensation?” he spitted out angrily and threw the fake bill on the table.

“Sheriff, are you accusing me of being a liar? How dare you?” Caroline declared indignantly and so naturally that she almost believed herself she was telling the truth.

“Do you seriously expect me to believe you paid $250 for her? I say you didn’t bring her real papers showing the real price and this one is for another nigger. With her fair skin and gentle face she must have cost a fortune.”

“That’s exactly what I paid. I am not into spending exuberant amounts on simple house help. This is complete waste of money. You must have mistaken me for someone else,’’ Caroline continued.

“Very well then,’’ the Sheriff stated, drawling his words. “If that is the case I hope you don’t mind it if we treat her to a branding iron the way we treat other runaways. I thought she was special for you. If not, I see no reason to be lenient. ”

He looked at Caroline, fully expecting her to give up or, at least, to plead him to change his mind. Surely, she didn’t want her beautiful slave to be subject to the treatment typically reserved for rough field hands? They both knew she was very valuable and mutilating her young flesh with a brand will make her a lot cheaper when sold. But if there was one thing Caroline Cranstone hated doing it was admitting defeat, no matter the consequences.

“Do what you have to do. I am not paying you more than I have to,’’ Caroline declared and looked the Sheriff straight in the eyes. Surely, he wouldn’t be so vain as to brand a slave just to prove a point to her mistress?  However, it did look as if she underestimated Sheriff Clark.

Clark’s face turned red with anger and he rushed out of the room and shouted a few orders to Murphy. The Sheriff crossed the small courtyard without paying Elizabeth, who was still sitting in the carriage, any attention and entered the jail. A moment later he dragged out Sophie, who did not understand what was going on. Elizabeth, equally oblivious, rushed to her friend only to be rudely told by the Sheriff to stay out of the way. In the corner of the yard Murphy was starting a small fire.

The Sheriff, acting very fast as if he feared that if he slowed down he’d change his mind, tied Sophie to a post with ropes and looked at the porch. Caroline exited the building and was looking at the scene calmly. Her apparent lack of interest seemed to infuriate the Sheriff even more: he stooped over the fire and with a pair of tongs lifted a hot piece of iron shaped as letter “R”.

“What is going on?!” Elizabeth raised her voice but it was too late.

The Sheriff pushed Sophie’s dress off the shoulder and, holding the long handle firmly, pressed the iron against her left shoulder blade. The hissing sound on her sizzling flesh was overwhelmed by a scream of agony.
 






87 comments:

  1. Wow! The story is taking absolute the right direction. Can't wait to read more about the fate of Sophie. I guess she now belongs legally to Caroline. Lets see how she will handle a runaway slave… Maybe everything will be fine as long as ELizabeth and Caroline will get along with each other...

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    1. Glad you like it. More to come. I'd question the legality of Caroline's ownership claim though, I don't think it should be very high up on Sophie's list of things to worry about right now.

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  2. While I realize I am probably in the minority, I do hope that the worst end she may encounter would be serving as Elizabeth's slave long term. Seeing how much Elizabeth cares about her and Caroline clearly doesn't, it seems to me that while she may hold out until Elizabeth jumps through a few hoops first, ultimately she would allow her to return with her proper mistress. Even if she went full bitch and required payment for her, she has through her careless and cruel indifference reduced her value significantly.
    I would like to speculate based on the way the scene was described, that the brand Sophie received, though certainly a painful burn, shouldn't be a 3rd degree burn. The small fire was just started and the Sheriff rushed into the branding. The burn may simply be second degree then, quite painful but not a lifetime disfigurement.
    While I would like to see Sophia in the end, not trapped, but possibly spending time as Elizabeth's secret slave whenever she has the opportunity. I admit to a desire to see Elizabeth get to experience a bit of it under Caroline's hands before she consents to returning Sophia. She may discover the deception and take inspiration from it as well as use it as leverage to allow her to explore the idea with Elizabeth as well as Sophia. After all, it seems clear that Caroline has certain interests in the slaves based on the hygiene she insists they follow and the strange undergarments she requires them to wear, I think we simply haven't seen it yet as she has a guest staying over, but upon discovering their kinky secret she would be confident they wouldn't be able to reveal hers when she makes use of them both as more "personal" slaves.
    I often like to imagine that the three in this gif are Caroline in the dress with Elizabeth and Sophia on her leashes.
    https://78.media.tumblr.com/92cb2b111899e7c194cf9a85f83432b4/tumblr_p9838xB8rR1qb8izzo1_500.gif

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    1. I agree with you actually, and hope for a 'happier' ending to the series. I hope Camille takes your post into consideration, especially since she had trouble writing this happening to Sophie. Camille, you don't have to go for a miserable ending where Sophie is crushed! Not all your readers want to see that :)

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    2. If it is any consolation, slavery is on it's way out, based on when this story takes place. She won't be a slave the rest of her life.

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    3. I'm not really familiar with US history but isn't there a little unpleasantness before the end of slavery? 'Slave' Sophie may have a natural end even if she fails to regain her former 'white' status but lots could happen in the meantime.

      I proofed this for Camille but I have no idea where she's taking this but I think she's in full control of the narrative even if it's not detailed yet.

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    4. Thank you for sharing your ideas. Seeing all the different ideas from readers here I am almost tempted to go all Rashomon on you and offer various takes on the same plot. Obviously you can't possibly incorporate them all into a story. I have my own ideas and a rough outline that I try to stick to but time and again I deviate from it so I can't really exclude anything at this point! Sorry, no spoilers!

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    5. Well, my idea was that Sophie would get socially ruined, maybe impregnated, from her adventure and cast out/disowned by her family. She'd then live with Elizabeth, but when Elizabeth marries the gentlemen she met at Caroline's party Sophie has to resume the role of slave to keep up appearances for Elizabeth's sake...but it would be the gentle kind of slavery where Sophie isn't treated too harshly by her Mistress, and they both end up enjoying the new relationship between the,.

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    6. Orc Dominion, some good ideas here and similar (but not identical) to what's currently being planned. We'll see. As I said, the story largely writes itself.

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  3. I must admit I am waiting for Elizabeth to join Sophie. But both of them become permanent slaves to caroline

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    1. I think it will be a bit of an overkill, but I see where you're coming from!

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  4. Loved it! Glad to see the update btw.

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  5. Tbh I do not favor a happy ending. Slavery is nothing to joke around with as Sophie now learns. But i would like to see maybe some situations in which Sophie is nearly rescued or is taken eg near the plantation of her parents. Then her rescue and old live would be so near but due to her slave status out of reach. But lets see first how she will be treated by her new owner when Sophie returns from the sheriff. Maybe she even tells Caroline the truth about the charade... The relationship between Caroline and Elizabeth is very interesting, too. I still have hopes that Elizabeth might be an octoroon. Hopefully we see a new chapter soon. Keep up your good work!

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  6. I haven't quite analyzed my reaction to know why I feel this way, but when I saw the brand, I knew I couldn't read this section. It's going into territory I'm not comfortable with, as much as I love Camille's work. I'm more into the shame angle than the pain side. I just can't handle this level.

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    1. Thanks for your comment. I totally understand. Like you, I am a lot more into the shame angle than pain. That is why the latter is introduced in a very sketchy way and is hardly central to the story. You can basically skip the last couple of graphs if you think it is hard for you to handle.

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  7. I haven't read this chapter yet and I'm really excited. "taking her to the point of no return" and that image really made my day!! toxicmask

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    1. Great. Please come back to say what you think once you read it.

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  8. I apologize for English, read with a translator. And I write the same with a translator.

    I really liked this story. Immediately fell in love with this story. It began as a game and continued as a game, albeit with dire consequences. I hope for a good end. Don't forget that Elizabeth and Sofia are friends. Elizabeth's worried about Sofia. Elizabeth and Sophie are two ladies with parents. And they must return home as a lady. This is important in my opinion.
    Caroline needs to find out the truth about Sophie, but she can't tell anyone, and Sophie will be a slave to everyone in the house. Elizabeth needs to understand that to continue to hide the truth will lead to more consequences from parents as Elizabeth and Sophie.

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    1. Thank you for your comment. Yes, parents are important to the story and we can't have them magically disappear from her life. This connection to her privileged existence would have to be dealt with. Obviously she cannot remain a slave if they know about it.

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  9. Thank you for the great chapter and continuing the story. I think the focus here on branding is not in pain. It is in shame and humiliation. Becoming a maid and slave with no return. And that all because of her own needs and stupidity. The brand was real and permanent. With it Sophie/Sophia is unmarriageable and somehow stuck to inferior status. And we have to remember that she has her submissive sexual needs leading to that direction.

    Elisabeth might now understand that all. Speak to her friend seriously about the altered situation and convince her of the importance of acting accordingly.

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    1. You are very welcome. Some good points here. The brand itself does not make her a slave, but it makes her unmarriageable and even more dependant on Elizabeth who knows her secret. We'll soon see how she acts upon it.

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  10. So good. I can't wait until the next chapter?

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    1. Thank you. No deadline on the next chapter, but it will definitely happen.

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  11. Wow, was this ever worth the wait! Excellent plotting and writing and, especially, character development. I love the way the personalities of the three main actors combine to lead Sophie inexorably to her fate. Sophie’s impetuosity, Elizabeth’s vanity and concern for her reputation, Caroline’s vindictiveness. I agree that the branding is painful, but the plot and the characters make that treatment inevitable.

    Since we are sharing alternative scenarios, during your long hiatus, I was thinking the plot should proceed as follows: The slaver approaches Caroline, who has been separated from Elizabeth, and asks a fortune for the return of Sophie. He prattles on about what a good-looking wench the girl is. Caroline, annoyed at Sophie in general and jealous of Elizabeth’s success with the young man they both covet, loses it. Yes, she says, the beauty is the problem. She pays the slaver NOT to return Sophie but rather take her away and remove some of her beauty, perhaps by fattening her up, or whatever else he thinks of to make her unattractive. Off they go. An epilogue five years later has Elizabeth finally finding Sophie, who now looks and acts like Hattie McDaniel in Gone With The Wind and has become a fixture in the slave quarters of a remote plantation.

    I know, write my own dad-gummed story. We all let our minds wander, because it’s fun. Thank goodness we have Camiile to do the real work.

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  12. This was a good chapter, and worth a wait. I liked that the sherif made her do some menial work, cleaning up the slave pens. She needed to be branded, too; she needs to have her new status become unescapable. This was a good move. Now Caroline needs to insist that Elizabeth buy Sophie back. She should make out a proper bill of sale for Sophie, too. With that and the brand on her shoulder, her days as a White woman are over. Then Elizabeth can have some fun with her newly acquired property.

    Perhaps, now that she’s branded, her chastity won’t be as important. It would be good to have her bred.

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  13. fantastic chapter. i'm looking forward to sophie losing more of her white identity. something to affect her speech like her tongue would nice to prevent her slavery accent from lapsing, though i don't know how realistic that would be.

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    1. You are right, that won't be very realistic. I think continuous practice, talking to other slaves and fear of punishment from her mistress if she breaks character will do the trick just as well.

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  14. Thanks Camille
    Lovely continuation an inspiration to get the keys clicking again

    Jackie J
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  15. 30 comments, yikes. Awesome chapter, as usual. Can’t wait to see what happens to Sophie next. One thing’s for sure, since she’s been branded as a runaway, her days as a house servant are over, so she’ll have to go live in the slave quarters. Which plantation, though? The sheriff can get her sold to a new owner. But I hope Camille sends her back to Caroline’s, where she could marry a field hand and join her equals in the slave quarters where she belongs.

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    1. Cheers. There is still a lot of ground to cover before we reach that stage if ever. Watch this space!

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  16. no update again :(

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    1. If there is anything this story should teach a reader it is the virtue of patience.

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    2. You are a tease which something else I've learned :) However you're a beginner in the patience teaching stakes - KT Pel's 'Riverside Girl' story on FM has been in abeyance for a couple of years IIRC!

      R

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  17. I saw an interesting story called the enslavement of Kathryn by petlover54 it should be up here. I just typed into Google to find it

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    1. That one certainly makes the steamiest of Jackie J's stories seem like a Barbara Cartland romance novel by comparison. The author's nick name is a good hint what you can expect.

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    2. Indeed. But I must say it takes downgrade to another level. It's a pity it was never finished though

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  18. Poor Sophie
    Once branded
    No planter
    Will EVER marry her now

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    1. Should be the least of her worries methinks! However, she hasn't seen my outline so she has NO idea!

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  19. Where can I find the rest of this story?

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    1. You mean the previous parts? Probably the fastest way is clicking on the SW label after the story. Alternatively you can browse the blog archive to the right. The first part of the story was published last November.

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    2. Thanks. I've discovered all 14 parts, even part 12, which is 3 paragraphs that are repeated in part 13.

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  20. Nice chapter.Thanks. Sophia/Sophie is even more stuck in her situation. Due to her own actions and also stupidity. And certsinly her sexual drive in submission. The sherif will help (or demand) new slave papers written and notarized. Mentioning her characteristics, brand on the left shoulder blade and her
    cheap original value. p.

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    1. Let's see if he'd want to be so formal now. Or will he settle for a hefty compensation for all his troubles?

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  21. As someone who's fascinated by women having the downward-mobility fetish,I don't want them to wind up regretting having it.She needs to survive to the end of slavery.

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  22. An Appreciative ReaderJune 7, 2018 at 11:22 PM

    A lot of comments here, very interesting reading and excellent chapter. Understand your reticence, for me personally it's because this story is the closest to a tragic reality that it makes at times uncomfortable reading, to put it mildly. Good luck with the future chapters, sorry Sophie is doomed but it feels that to go any other way would not be realistic or hang together plot wise...

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    1. reticence - the quality of being reticent

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    2. Thanks for your appreciation as always. It is a very tough balancing act. I think it has evolved into something bigger than just a downgrade story. At least I'd like to think that. Let's see where the story takes us from this point.

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  23. Hey Camille. Have a new story I read on Amazon Kindle. It's called Corporate dress code by Daring Diane. It's a feminisation story. And of course Downgrade. Where they don't even realise they are being downgraded

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    1. Hi, thanks. I an an avid follower of Daring Diane. She is a marvellous author and I am very pleased she is expanding her base by writing on themes other than age regression.

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  24. I can't wait until the next chapter. How far away is it boohoo

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  25. Late to the party however, first off thank you Camille for the next part of this wonderful tale.

    I can relate to your comment regarding affinity to the character, through your expert authorship the character you have built in sophie and her developing situation, draws the reader into it and yes almost become protective of the character.

    Regarding your comment "saddens me to see where this is headed", yes i can agree, however if it is to be historically accurate then i could not forsee the end as "and they lived happily ever after", of course that not taking into account Camilles literary skills should she wish to take us in another direction.

    As readers we can be assured that however sophies journey concludes, we will be taken on that journey in Camilles capable hands.

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    1. Thank you for your comment, much appreciated. I know my limitations as a writer well enough to take your praise too seriously, but thanks anyway! In either case, a lot of credit goes to SW for starting this story and urging me to take it on, and to Robyn H for the editing.

      Hopefully not too long before the next chapter's ready!

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    2. Well Camille my praise of your writing is merely how i feel about it, in this genre i enjoy your writing style, if you have limitations then they most definitely are not hindering my enjoyment of this story.

      I will leave the intricate literary critiques to those who have the knowledge of such things, i am a simplistic type i like or i don't like, and dear lady i like your work.

      I concur with your crediting SW, and Robyn H for the editing.

      Thanking you for all your work in keeping this site running.

      PS/ your authorship isn't too bad either, lol.

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    3. Waiting to hear the good news about the next chapter

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    4. chamomile say story write itself. seem to be paradox. not sure who is author

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  26. Maybe the next step for Sophia is to get black bred

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  27. This story has it all. The theme is so real and echoes recorded events in history in some ways. Camille, your ever steady build up has been masterful in its planning and your writing flows beautifully for the reader. Who could ask for more?

    S.W. started something great and Camille you have pushed it further and higher than anyone expected. No comment would be complete without mention of Robyn H who is an excellent editor; who has the amazing ability to spot what others miss, to make flowing stories where before there was halting words. I should really start sending my work to you again for perusal.

    Excellent story and what a team. Camille, 64 comments must be a record. Well done.

    Andy Eng

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    1. Thank you very much, glad you like it.
      *blushes and runs away to polish Part 15*

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    2. If you were to polish this for publication, I think that you should seriously consider removing the Gone with the Wind type slave accent. I don’t think it has any place in a modern work not because of how offensive it might be, but because of how cringy it is. I can’t take her plight seriously when she talks like this,

      “Sorry, suh. Ah lied when I say I wuz real lady. Ah jus’ iz da housemaid for ma missus. Ah jus’ got real scared, dat all,’’ Sophie replied in a meek voice of a slave waiting for her punishment, hating herself for betraying her real self. “Please don tell da missus dat, suh.”

      This is objectively awful because it is distracting. Misspelling words is a lazy way of conveying that a person is speaking differently. Write the sentence in English and then use the text to describe what it sounds like.

      “Sorry, sir. I lied when I said I was a real lady. I was just a housemaid for my mistress. I just got really scared, that’s all.” Sophie replied in a meek voice of a slave waiting for her punishment, hating herself for betraying her real self. “Please don’t tell my mistress that, sir.”

      I think that the line you inserted in the middle of the dialog is sufficient to convey that she is not speaking like a proper lady. If you sprinkle in comments like that throughout, you don’t have to hit the reader of the head with that negro slave talk. (You can also show us by how other characters react to the way she speaks.)

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    3. I'm going to go ahead and disagree that "Sophie replied in a meek voice of a slave waiting for her punishment" properly conveys how differently she is speaking compared to her normal speech. You even filled in some of the words that were left out intentionally as she is not using proper grammar. The slave talk makes it immediately clear when she slips from one role to another without having to say anything extra. My interpretation could be incorrect but I believe that the words are not misspelled but written more phonetically just as she would sound. If the entire work was written this way it might grate over time but seeing as it is only her lines and only some of the time it seems to make things better.
      I read a story by another author where the main point of view was that of an 18 year old highschool girl, many times I had to look things up on urban dictionary because I had never heard the terms before, there were those who were rather critical because of this effort to be authentic. Others were able to recognize the effort being made to make the story sound right instead of just writing the dialogue like the character lived in some other world where teenagers don't use slang and make references that their parents won't get.
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    4. This manner of speech has been utilized from the start, so it should fine to throw in a single sentence like "Sophie replied in a meek voice of a slave" every now and then as a reminder. You don’t want to belabor the point every time she talks like a goddamn fool. Yes, the words are spelled out phonetically to illustrate the accent with which she is speaking and that is a bad thing. I have to slow my reading down to translate what she is saying and what I hear isn’t the language of a scared slave. She sounds like a mammy caricature or a white man doing blackface in a minstrel show. Talk like that was done for comedic effect, so it’s out of place in a story like The Secret Slave. Cutting back on the stereotype would make her experience more real as “Dat mek her real mad” takes me out of the story.

      In Judgment at Nuremberg (1961), some of the actors start out speaking German and there is some back and forth with English translators. After a few minutes they switch over to English because doing this back and forth for the entire film would be tiresome. The audience knows they are still speaking German without explicitly being told so. In the same way, we can understand the way Sophie is talking without the misspellings.

      https://youtu.be/d8wipF1sqkY?t=830

      One further point of consideration, there are readers from around the globe who only know English as a second language and the lines using non-standard English may be lost on them. There was a person who commented in this chapter that they were enjoying the story via an internet translation. Google wouldn’t be able to do anything with words that were spelled phonetically.

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    5. You are raising some very interesting points. If there is one thing I'll agree with in your reasoning it's that it can be often very hard to decipher it. I remember how confused I was at times when I was reading Mark Twain, Harriet Beecher Stowe or historic slave narratives as you literally need to re-read a sentence several times to get to the meaning. However, there is a long and glorious history of slave talk in literature as you know. I haven't read anything recent about the antebellum South - did modern U.S. writers stop using slave accents for political correctness reasons so that they don't offend anyone or what have you? Or is it still used?

      In either case, I think it serves several important points. Speech is a very important part of who we are, deliberately changing it serves to create a new character with another social and cultural background. People around us evaluate us by how we look and how we speak whether we like it or not. There is no easier and cheaper way to affect one's perception that to start talking differently - assuming you can pull it off and it comes across naturally.

      For Sophie talking like a slave is part of her transformation. She doesn't look black so it is one of the few things to set her apart from her former equals. And yes, she probably does sound like a caricature and that's the whole point - she's a white lady pretending to be a slave, talking like this is not natural to her.

      As for your movie example, I think it misses the point completely. A foreign language is hardly the same as an accent that denotes one's class and upbringing. Imagine Oliver Twist where the characters will all drop their Cockney and talk "normal". That would be a closer analogy - and I don't think this will work. Dickens understood the value of accents very well - you'll find numerous example of that in his books.

      Interesting you'd bring movies into this. I've always been irritated by this Hollywood tradition to have people speak English with foreign accents. You come to Paris and everyone speaks English with an overdone French accent, even to themselves. It serves no real purpose and often comes across as ridiculous. Yet, unlike with Sophie, it is not meant to show a character's new identity.




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    6. Setting the issue of sensitivity aside, the problem with your argument in favor of intentional misspellings, typos and such is that you’re barking up the wrong tree. You say that Sophie talks like that in an attempt to convince the other characters that she is a slave. That’s all well and good, however, you’re forgetting that the text is for us and not them. It doesn’t make sense for you lay Sophie’s slave talk on so thick that it permeates into the text because we’re the only ones who get to see that. You’re trying so hard to convince us that she is a slave, but we’re not the ones who need convincing. It’s extra dumb because we know her backstory and are partial to her inner thoughts. It would be different if Sophie were a character in someone else’s story. Writing her dialogue as you are now would actually serve a purpose because it tells us something about her. Changing was into wuz for Sophie in Sophie’s story doesn’t do much of anything save to annoy because as I said, only we get to see that and we know she's pretending. It's stupid.

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    7. I am sorry you think it is stupid and extra dumb. You make it sound as if the entire story is written in unintelligible slave jibber. I am not sure why a few sentences should be a sticking point (assuming we do set the issue of sensitivity aside as you said). For me it is important to have it there for the reasons mentioned above. I do understand your preference for something that is a lot more understated, but if you've read my other stories, you'd know how much I love accents and general themes of de-education. Surely I am not going to give up now!

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    8. As co-author I must comment here. The complaint would hold some water if the dialogue was indeed a caricature: it is not - the great body of literature from that era shows that this was typical of how slaves spoke. I would be happy to see evidence to the contrary. Also, we might expect slaves who spoke any other way might have been warned/punished for being uppity. They were uneducated and spoke in their own dialect - let's accept that; that's what the evidence shows. You have clearly missed the writer's (my) observation made in the opening chapter: "Sophia had been waited upon by slaves since the day of her birth and she knew perfectly well how a house girl was expected to act and speak." Note the use of the word EXPECTED. Please read carefully before making complaints such as this.
      Further, the objection would stand up if the dialogue was, somehow, set in the modern period: it is not - it is written AS IF in that period.
      It would much reduce the context and 'feel' of the story to reduce the dialogue to some sanitized, PC version and, like it or not, this is how slaves commonly spoke. Would a tale of an old sea-dog set in older times be ruined for you if it included "Aye, aye Cap'n"? What about an Irishman cheerfully saying "Top o' t'mawnin' ter ye me old pal"? Or perhaps "niggaz" used in a modern tale from the 'hood'? Stereotypical perhaps, caricature certainly not. I am sorry the story offends you this way, it is not meant to be offensive but the setting MUST have elements that would cause offensive unless read intelligently and with a proper context in mind. It is not to your taste - fair enough - move on and read something else, don't torture yourself with it and please don't accuse the authors of being dumb. We have used vivid colours to paint our pictures and not everyone will enjoy them - others will think it better because we did. SW

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    9. If you will allow me to transpose The Secret Slave to another time and place for a brief moment, I wonder if we might gain a new perspective. Let us reimagine this story as “The Secret Simpleton”, where our plucky heroine wants to know what it is like to be seen as mentally deficient. To do this, she starts talking like so,

      “Butt ahh wuz ownly pretendenng to buh retardead.”

      Writing a character with a speech impediment requires careful consideration to pull off. When using a heavy-handed approach as shown in the above, I think that says a lot more about the author than it does the character. There are alternate ways of accomplishing the goal without resorting to such extreme measures.

      “But I was only pretending to be retarded.” Although the words in her mind were clear and concise, they came out of her mouth slurred and tone-deaf due to the numbing agent that had been injected into her gums.

      The advantage to doing it this way is that readability has been enhanced, her condition has been elaborated upon and the person who wrote it doesn’t look like an absolute moron.

      The reason I nitpick these few lines is because they are horrendously atrocious and ultimately detract from what is otherwise a fine narrative. Nothing ages a story more (in a bad way) than dated dialogue and the slave accent utilized in this piece fell out of use half a century ago. Even if it was period accurate, the writing is not intended to be read by an 1840’s audience. It is explicitly for modern sensibilities and language like that is generally perceived to be an ignorant and racist caricature of the past. I find it silly that this is what is regarded as an essential, unchangeable and authentic part of history, yet I somehow doubt that the same could be said of everything else that has been described in this story.

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    10. Look, I wrote this story AS IF it had been wriiten in the past i.e. in a style appropriate to writing of that period which does indeed appear heavy-handed to us now, but this story is MEANT to read as if written then. I did this to give the intelligent reader the notion that it was a narrative from that era. Go read, as Camille says, Twain, Beecher Stowe or indeed slave narratives from the time and compare and contrast: the dialogue used is in keeping. Do you think I used the word 'countenance' and not 'face' liberally for no good reason? I wanted to give a suggestion, at least, of an old-time narrative. I fear that you are on a high horse here about something really not worth the trouble - this is not high art or great literature and has no such pretensions - it is meant to appeal to those with an interest in D/s and uses a historical context for its flavour. You say "Nothing ages a story more (in a bad way) than dated dialogue and the slave accent utilized in this piece fell out of use half a century ago." Too bad for Twain then eh? I still enjoy him. I reiterate: it is intended to be read as if written more than a hundred and fifty years ago. This story may well be horrendously atrocious to few or to many and I'd suggest that those readers pass on it at the first 'Yes'm missus." (Aye, aye cap'n) than get their panties in a bunch over it. SW

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    11. I will see your “countenance” and raise you all the words that weren't in the common vernacular at the time in which this story was to have taken place. Octoroon dates back to 1855-1860, yet Sophie is advertised as such in a slave auction years prior and Martha speaks as if everybody knows what that is.

      "Reckon yo' be mus' be octoroon wit dat real high yaller 'plexion yo's got"

      An Octoroon is defined as someone with one-eighth black ancestry so it makes sense that the term didn't come into being until America had gone through several generations of slavery.

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    12. "Slaves, of course, were not usually permitted underwear"

      This is a bold statement, but after doing some historical research, I have determined that you are correct. Slaves were not usually permitted underwear because the first recorded use of the word came in the 1870s, decades after the events of this story.

      It's curious how your hands were tied when it came to the way slave dialogue was presented, yet you were not nearly as bound in other matters. Shall we investigate the claim as to house slaves being forced to remove their body hair or can we agree that these are some fun fabrications? This is what I meant when I said that the story was “explicitly” for modern sensibilities. If you want to pretend otherwise, you should have done your homework.

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    13. It amuses me that you are spending time researching the background to pick holes in what is nothing more than a piece of niche D/s writing - it really does. As I stated more than once before in comments this piece has no pretensions and the reader should accept it for what it is; I hope it gives enough of an impression of a narrative of that time for readers to accept the context and read accordingly: that you don't perplexes me somewhat -why bother with it! You are quite wrong regarding usage of 'octoroon' as there are plenty of examples of its usage beginning from the early 19th century: one of many examples is the poem 'The Quadroon Girl' by H W Longfellow from 1842
      http://www.hwlongfellow.org/poems_poem.php?pid=100.
      I am perfectly willing to accept your criticism of 'underwear' - I have better things to do than go look it up and clash with you over it.
      The idea that this story could be for anything other than a modern readership is laughable! This is published for a D/s readership and I hardly think it likely that anyone anywhere could imagine for a second that it could belong to the past! It is written to give an impression of an old-time tale and yes, is loaded with 'fun fabrications' that might appeal to a D/s audience.
      You have taken this much to seriously indeed and it seems you have some sort of an axe to grind. I suggest you spend your time in more constructive pursuits than banging on over a point you have made at length several times. You don't like the dialogue, I accept that and respect your opinion but Camille isn't going to change her style of writing for you and neither will I mine when I come to supply more to this story. SW

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    14. Addendum: I misread octoroon as quadroon and I'm happy to accept that it is very likely misplaced in this story's setting by 10 or fifteen years. Similarly had I been more thorough I would have used 'under garments' and not underwear when describing S's attire. I wrote my parts in a rush and sent each unproofed - there is much in the way of finer detail in my parts that could be improved/corrected/polished. However, I suspect few readers will balk at my incorrect use of 'octoroon' even if they were aware that it was misplaced in the setting by a few years - this piece is, after all, not intended to be read as some historical treatise with weighty pretensions, it is quickly written (my parts anyway) and published for free and on a freely available blog. It is quite wrong and unfair of you to state "This is what I meant when I said that the story was “explicitly” for modern sensibilities. If you want to pretend otherwise, you should have done your homework." I have NEVER pretended otherwise as you already know from several of my previous comments and it COULD NOT possibly be taken as anything other than modern writing; the style and dialogue is used to create an impression and flavour that will set the context for the reader. No sensible reader could imagine for a single moment that this erotic D/s fiction was actually written in period. I am not inclined to comment further on this aspect of the story; we have covered the same ground repeatedly and I am becoming quite weary of it. I hope you can enjoy some of the other writing on Camille's blog - much of it excellent and less likely to offend you. SW

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  28. I’m glad Camille weighed in on this dialogue discussion. I agree with her completely. The change in Sophie’s way of speaking from the days when was part of the planter class is absolutely crucial to her masquerade. In addition, it is part of who she has become; her new persona. Other slaves, and the whites like Elizabeth now recognize her in this persona. More importantly, Sophie sees herself that way. If she tried to talk like Scarlett O’Hara she would be looked at as frivolous and a pretender. It could also get her whipped. She knows that and should continue to speak as Camille has her speak, as part of her self-acceptance into the serving class, part and parcel of her realization that life is easier if she just does what she’s told to do.

    Sophie’s dialogue is completely in character as Camille has written her. Having people speak in character is a long and noble tradition by a list of authors that includes, among others, Mark Twain and Charles Dickens. Camille is just joining that group.

    As to not being able to understand Sophie, I understand her perfectly, and I’m a Yankee! Lawzy!. Carry on, Camille. This discussion is a tad abstruse, and academic. Awaiting the next chapter, yassuh.

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  29. I agree! See my tuppence worth above. SW

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  30. My apologies for not noticing your earlier comment, SW. Thanks to you and Camille for writing a compelling (77 comments!) story that has interesting and believable characters and is historically accurate. Bev.

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  31. Is this story not being finished?

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  32. Hello, Camille. Just asking when we can think reading the next chapter? It is interesting to see where you take the story. She now is in the sherif’s custody, her slave papers are fake, her owner tried to decieve the sherif, she is literally branded as a runaway.

    I would like to read about yhe feelings of Sophia/Sophie. She must feel that she is somehow quilty toher situation. Starting the deception and running away. Because of her own choises, stupidity and submissive feelings she is now in that situation. Restoring her own life is not the first option.

    There story is yours and SW’s, naturally. Just thinking. The sherif could aucrion her. The buyercould be Elisabeth, Catharine or some one else. The last option world make her situation most complicated. Somehow I would like to read about Elisabeth being her mistress. Their changing relation, Sophie’s submissivefeelingsand Elisabeth enjoying her power on her (former?) friend. But as said the story in naturally in your good hands. piret.

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  33. Reading this chapter on my phone is funny. The chapter takes on third of the page to scroll through but the comments are 2 thirds lol

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