Translated by T. H. Enerdly
This is a caption I found years ago on a now defunct French Yahoo Group. I referred to it in the comments section of the recent Olivia Holt posting and thought that at least some readers might like seeing it. It helps to know that in France, everyone with the means takes their vacation in August.
T. H. Enerdly
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Hermine knows the house, the one in which she serves as a maid, like the back of her hand. After all, it's hers.
During summer vacation season, she lists it with a rental agency, the rental fee including the wages of a live-in maid. With the tacit consent of the rental agency, Hermine plays the role of the maid, thus putting her at the service of the renters. In this way, she could be certain that she was no the longer the mistress of the house but the one who wore the uniform of a maid.
Unexpectedly, her most recent renters asked her if she wanted to leave her “dump” for Paris.
“It's so difficult to find good help!”
Will Hermine’s summertime lark become permanent? Will become the servant of a couple of musicians and their 16-year-old daughter? Will she quit her job as a pharmacist to become a maid? And if she does, what will she say to her coworkers? And what will she say to her maid when the latter returns from her vacation?
This is a caption I found years ago on a now defunct French Yahoo Group. I referred to it in the comments section of the recent Olivia Holt posting and thought that at least some readers might like seeing it. It helps to know that in France, everyone with the means takes their vacation in August.
T. H. Enerdly
***
Hermine knows the house, the one in which she serves as a maid, like the back of her hand. After all, it's hers.
During summer vacation season, she lists it with a rental agency, the rental fee including the wages of a live-in maid. With the tacit consent of the rental agency, Hermine plays the role of the maid, thus putting her at the service of the renters. In this way, she could be certain that she was no the longer the mistress of the house but the one who wore the uniform of a maid.
Unexpectedly, her most recent renters asked her if she wanted to leave her “dump” for Paris.
“It's so difficult to find good help!”
Will Hermine’s summertime lark become permanent? Will become the servant of a couple of musicians and their 16-year-old daughter? Will she quit her job as a pharmacist to become a maid? And if she does, what will she say to her coworkers? And what will she say to her maid when the latter returns from her vacation?
Sound like a great plot for a story x
ReplyDeleteMake great story
ReplyDeleteI don't like to rain on people's parade, but I just don't get it. Here's a very basic plot outline, somehow tied to a photo that doesn't illustrate anything in the story. The photo isn't exactly a dramatic scene. It looks like it was clipped from a Hilton advert. And this is something to get enthused about? What gives?
ReplyDeleteI don't see anyone getting enthused about it so not quite sure who your comment refers to. Yes, it's a basic plot outline as one would expect from a caption. It is an original take on a rather predictable genre though and this what makes it interesting in my opinion. Captions are not proper stories and are meant to suggest rather than to describe in all the detail. Many of them can be turned into good stories, others are better left as they are.
DeleteYeah, this is doesn’t really work as a caption. It’s too disjointed. The end is asking questions about things that were never previously brought up.
DeleteAn effective caption captures a short scene. When I look at this picture, I am imagining Hermine has just found a stain that her new guests have made. Maybe they’ll try to claim it was there before they checked in. That could be interesting interaction given that it is her house. She has to fight against the urge to say something when she knows they are lying.
Maybe the original poster is
ReplyDeletea) suggesting that we need more new stories
b) suggesting a storyline for the legion of 'Anonymous' posters to be getting on with?
Just a thought.
Well for me the picture and brief outline, gives me a nice trigger for my imagination, to build a story in my mind, a fantasy, so i say thank you for posting it, i appreciate your efforts.
ReplyDeleteThis was a promising plot outline. It could have stood alone very nicely. Adding the picture just created an unnecessary distraction.
ReplyDeleteAll of nerdy's work is on either the asstr.org website or Camille's blog. It is not a very extensive collection of work.
ReplyDeleteT. H. Enerdly