by BigBird74
3.
Home at last! Travelling through the centre of town
was never a good idea and late on a Friday afternoon was probably the very
worst moment. Dahlia took a deep sigh of relief as her car wended its way up
the hillside to her remote outpost atop one of the hills overlooking Barton.
Hilltop was an exclusive kind of place. The grey, drab and overcrowded
apartment blocks that predominated Barton’s heartlands gradually gave way to
ever more greenery and wide expanses of countryside. Dahlia’s magnificent home
was perched on the side of cliff face. Far below in the shallow below sat
Barton, a slight haze sitting over it, the result mainly of traffic pollution
but also natural weather patterns that conspired to keep the bad air down
there, while up here, the air was crystal clear.
The house itself was massive and pristine. The
whitewashed stone walls kept the building comfortably cool in the summer, while
retaining its warmth in the winter. Nothing had been overlooked in the design
of this palatial home. Dahlia had taken some credit for the munificence, but in
reality her involvement had been as token as picking between one of three pictures
displaying an artist’s rendition of how the place could look. Her heels clicked
loudly on the solid stone floor as she slinked her way indoors, where her maid,
Petra, was waiting for her.
Whether by conscious design or happy coincidence,
Petra was the perfect foil for showing off Dahlia’s brilliance. Whereas Dahlia
was slender, with perfectly shaped hips, thighs and bust, Petra was a large
girl, well built in the sense of a shot putter. Her short cropped hair, dark
with greying streaks throughout, contrasted horribly with Dahlia’s perfect mane
of thick hair, which hung beautifully down one side of her face, like a frame
for her, also near perfect, face. When Dahlia entered a room, everyone turned
to look at the embodiment of Venus. When Petra entered, it was usually to bring
them something. No, both looks and good fortune had smiled down upon Dahlia,
while missing Petra almost completely. But not absolutely.
See, Petra had decided to leave Dahlia’s service to go
work with her husband, Robert, on a new business venture. Sick and tired of her
picky boss – a hard lady to please – she had finally decided to jack it all in
and seek newer pastures. Today was her last day and she was in good spirits. So
much so that the mask of deference had slipped off almost completely. Dahlia
had been desperate to keep her and she had enjoyed saying no. It had left
Dahlia in a terribly difficult position. Adding to her woes was the unexpected
arrival of her sister, Melissa just a few days ago. Whereas Petra was Dahlia’s
root opposite, Melissa was just an ordinary copy of Dahlia. Whereas Dahlia’s
breasts were breath taking, Melissa’s were smaller and had encountered gravity
somewhat earlier. Even though Dahlia had the cutest button nose, Melissa’s
hooked itself in a less appealing downward trajectory. All those years Dahlia
had spent in the gym, Melissa had spent studiously avoiding exercise of any
sort, laughing a little at all the agonies her sister put herself through. That
said, as their fortunes diverged rapidly, the smile receded from her face and a
growing sense of jealousy that focused on those small, but important
differences between the two took hold.
Melissa’s run of bad luck – as she would term it and
not the series of poor choices her sister would call it – had led to her being
evicted from her flat in Barton. It is easy to blame the economy for many a
person’s woes, but Melissa’s inability to hold down a job, partly because of
poor aptitude to work, but mainly due to a venomous tongue, had seen her
traipse through a series of short lived jobs. So when Melissa turned up at her
sister’s door, Dahlia was reluctant to engage, but having always felt
responsible for her little sister, she took her in. After all the death of her
brother had put into plain perspective how important it was to maintain her
links to what remained of her family.
So that was the situation back home when Dahlia
arrived that evening to present Petra with a leaving gift and a cursory peck on
the cheek. Once out of the door, her current dilemma made itself plain. It
would take only a week for the house to collect dirt, she had to find a new
maid. It was then, at that moment, Melissa happened to wander by dressed in a
pair of loose baggy sweatpants and a light bulb went off in Dahlia’s pretty
head.
4
Those first few weeks of cohabiting with her sister
had put Dahlia on eggshells. Earlier on, she had dared to suggest that, maybe,
just possibly, Melissa could help around the house, only to feel the full
weight of her sister’s rebuttal as she blazed at her about her feeling superior
and assuming SHE must be the one who had to clean and cook.
However, Dahlia was not one to be easily put off and
she continued suggesting that Melissa might want to help in some way. Naturally
that was not the way it seemed to Melissa. She had spent years feeling a keen
sense of inferiority to her sister. Dahlia had always been the pretty one, the
sweet one, the one to be doted on with gifts, while Melissa was seen as second
best in virtually every way imaginable – except one.
Whether by design or nurture, Melissa had a prodigious
ability to lie. She was manipulative and cunning in a way Dahlia lacked almost
totally. This is not to say that Dahlia was a pushover, far from it. Just she
relied on steely resolve and willpower, while Melissa always opted for the
easier option.
Dahlia never fully appreciated this about Melissa and
assumed, as her sister, that they shared one another’s best interests. It was
this block in her side vision that made her believe her sister’s tears one
night that she simply needed help, like Dahlia. Perhaps a visit to the
therapist would bring her thinking more into line.
Dahlia was a little taken aback. She may have
mentioned seeing a ‘doctor’ in passing, but how did Melissa know she was seeing
a shrink? Before she could ask this, Melissa played on her insecurities.
“Of course not everyone sees the use of a shrink.” She
opined, playing immediately to Dahlia’s fears of being judged. “I mean, people
may think you are crazy, what with all you have going for you”. Her voice was
light hearted, but suggestive.
Dahlia wanted to shut this conversation down
immediately and just nodded silently, agreeing that it may be good for her
sister to see him too. She had no idea why Melissa might have suggested this,
but took it at face value, displaying a little too much trust in her sister’s
motives.
So a new routine established itself. At first all
seemed well, as far as Dahlia was concerned. Melissa went to see Dr Mark on
Thursdays, while Dahlia visited two days earlier. Almost instantly, Melissa’s
attitude around the house changed markedly. She began doing small chores and
soon seemed to be complying with Dahlia’s wishes, if somewhat grudgingly.
Even so, Dahlia’s attentions were increasingly drawn
elsewhere. Dr Mark’s knack for getting under her skin had grown only more adept
as the weeks drew on. Their conversations had focused on a great deal of
Eastern spiritualism, covering how everything we experience is a ‘game’ of
sorts and how with greater consciousness we can control our anxieties. Almost
everything about our lives has a degree of unreality that can be observed from
without. Dahlia was not a very deep person, but his philosophy made sense. It
sat comfortably with the reasons that drove her to visit him each week: a desire
to control her anxieties.
The fact she fancied him so intensely helped as well.
Indeed one might question her judgement a little when the doctor’s remarks
began to drift away from the comfortable ground they had occupied to now, to a
place far less inviting. While never liking the limelight and sometimes
questioning her looks and suitability for a job, she never once had deep
thoughts about whether she as a person deserved her success.
Yet this was where the conversation with her therapist
had led that morning. The idea had left her like a rabbit caught in the
headlights of an oncoming car. She muttered and felt completely lost for a time
as she cycled through her mind for a reason why she should be who she is.
Seeing his arrow had landed accurately, the doctor left the subject for now and
returned to more safe ground.
However, like an acorn planted in fertile ground, that
moment lived with Dahlia for the next few days and she was never far from its
pernicious logic. It was a natural partner for her chronic lack of confidence
and proved a toxic enough brew that she began to seriously contemplate it.
It was around this time that Melissa’s attitude
started to return to normal. The breezy, if offhand, way she had gone about her
household duties evaporated and her sharp tongue returned. It was during one of
these arguments that she laid down her view that Dahlia “simply did not deserve
to tell her what to do. After all, look at all the advantages you have! And you
think that makes yourself better than me.”
Those words rang a bell inside Dahlia’s head, so loud
and pervasive, she just walked away from the moment, her anger dissipating as
she simply ran out of juice.
So we now have to speculate how this will develop based only on this introduction.
ReplyDeleteI'm wondering just what Dr Mark's motives are. He's clearly trying to manipulate both sisters based on their existing predilictions - particularly Dahlia's guilty feeling that she's a fraud who doesn't deserve her obvious success. That, coupled with Melissa's, jealousy is fertile ground indeed. I think the swap will be between the sisters rather than between the maid and mistress as in the original - but Melissa will still be the name of the one who gets the better life ... I think :)
Will Petra figure again? Or is she merely a throw away character. Of course, the name may be reused if the fact that she's resigned her job isn't public knowledge.
Still eager for more. Thanks BB
R
Very interesting
ReplyDeleteThis is good
ReplyDeleteWell-written and interesting
Thanks. Looking forward to more
Charles
I think that Dhalia should be only tricked and manipulated by her sister.
ReplyDeletelooking forward to the next chapters. Really good setup for Dahlia's downfall.
ReplyDeleteI loved the original « Cleaner » story, even if the ending was too positive.
ReplyDeleteI am very delighted that BigBied had the courage to write a new version of this story. The beginning is very promising. Can’t hardly wait to read the next chapters.
Sylvia