tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-988993754670474624.post8314649037288115437..comments2024-03-28T18:12:56.268+03:00Comments on Ladies Becoming Maids: Story: A Good Deed Rarely Goes UnpunishedCamille Langtryhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16945716778850774065noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-988993754670474624.post-12111917095579806592018-07-29T17:49:17.375+03:002018-07-29T17:49:17.375+03:00I’ve been away so I hope I am still in time to com...I’ve been away so I hope I am still in time to comment. Thanks to JJ for another story – and at such length! Glad to see that again it has a single dramatic arc. The telling of the story from the alternative points of view worked very well: and the incident of the the tightly tied apron strings was a very nice piece of symbolism. However, I do have a couple of thoughts: I am glad to see that you have toned down the cruelty from some of your other stories, but I think you could go further still. In this case for example you have written Carissa to be a very dumb executive no doubt despite her excellent education. There is no need to have Carissa sedated by drugs and introduce an unlikely plot line to allow her to lose her inheritance. Echoing other comments, it would be perfectly plausible and more satisfying to allow Carissa to come to realise that being a maid was her role in life and for her to come to respect Robbie and her skills. This plot could work very well as you give the thoughts of both characters. On another matter, you often make the lady-now-maid to be seduced and overwhelmed by an erotic ploy of the woman-now-mistress. Leaving aside any comments on the artistic merits of this plot device, I believe an objective bystander would say that this turn of events is intrinsically unlikely and that this motif occurs too often in your stories. -- Miriam Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-988993754670474624.post-88511426846877226042018-07-20T11:08:53.379+03:002018-07-20T11:08:53.379+03:00Thank you all for your comments as always all take...Thank you all for your comments as always all taken on board. <br /><br />Each of us in our imaginings no doubt have a perfect plot and for the pace and style of the journey from privilege to the life of a maid. <br /><br />How did it start, why did they continue, why could they not revert back to their former life, that exquisite moment they reach the point of no return and are confronted by the realisation of what is now their lowly reality. <br /><br />Getting that from the mind into words is seldom easy<br /><br />Some stories will be way off the mark, some may come near and maybe, perhaps just maybe, one story resonates with the particular reader coming near to their own imaginings?<br /><br />My particular favourite on Camille's fantastic site is the "INTERVEIW WITH MADAME NGUYEN" Which for me ticks every box and the epilogue puts me in the mind of all the protagonists in such an exquisite way. <br /><br />Hugs<br />Jackie J<br />XX<br /><br /> <br /><br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-988993754670474624.post-8538479853835345012018-07-19T23:09:27.652+03:002018-07-19T23:09:27.652+03:00This is another very good story, a good idea, well...This is another very good story, a good idea, well realised and well written.charles rydernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-988993754670474624.post-39287180100397847422018-07-18T04:29:03.966+03:002018-07-18T04:29:03.966+03:00That actually was a well thought out critique. The...That actually was a well thought out critique. They didn't think the story worked that well because of A, B, C and D and that's fair. It is exactly what you would want constructive criticism to be. You are free to disagree with them and I am sure we would welcome that discussion. <br /><br />Unless someone is complaining about a lack of stories being posted, there's no need for the snark. Anonymous4 made no claims as to their own ability, not that a lack of ability should preclude someone from critiquing another. You don't have to be a great filmmaker to say that a movie sucked and telling someone to "go make your own" doesn't address the criticisms they might have.Norma Beennoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-988993754670474624.post-46982114326471425692018-07-18T02:19:10.551+03:002018-07-18T02:19:10.551+03:00Dear Anonymous4. Thank you for such an insightful ...Dear Anonymous4. Thank you for such an insightful breakdown of Jackie J's latest creation. It was well thought out and plainly written for everyone to understand. I would like to make a suggestion, if I may. Why not write your own story as you feel it should be written. I think we would all love to see and read the perfect Lady 2 maid story. <br />Maid lukasnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-988993754670474624.post-12620371241953108972018-07-18T02:08:27.153+03:002018-07-18T02:08:27.153+03:00It took me a little bit to catch on with the chang...It took me a little bit to catch on with the changing perspectives, but I enjoyed the story. I could see the motivation for Clarissa to switch initially and maybe even to take it further with Robbie's goodness readily available, but it is a little more of a stretch for it to become so ingrained and I'd prefer it not be done under the influence. <br /><br />Probably the most clever and definitely one of my favorite stories of all time is Madame DeVille. I love how you locked in the reclusive Madame both in identity and then legally. Very clever and the baby steps down the slippery slope of lady2maiddom is so pure. I'd love to hear how her second book goes.ArdentOneXhttps://fetlife.com/users/1508571noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-988993754670474624.post-67745219059422413022018-07-18T01:14:45.662+03:002018-07-18T01:14:45.662+03:00The changes all happen much too rapidly, too easil...The changes all happen much too rapidly, too easily, for the story to be interesting. For such a change to have psychological plausibility, there has to be some sense of the protagonist's inner self, some kind of attraction-repulsion dynamic, but no-one in this tale seems to have an inner self. Perhaps the story should be read as simply a bdsm story with the "lady2maid" element as just a framing device, but even as bdsm story it doesn't have psychological credibility. For those looking for a simple "meet to beat" bdsm story, there's too much of a back-story, for everyone else, not enough.Anonymous4noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-988993754670474624.post-46509462422607579992018-07-17T23:32:22.625+03:002018-07-17T23:32:22.625+03:00I'd like a couple who start as bf/gf but evolv...I'd like a couple who start as bf/gf but evolve into master & maid and like it that way...L.E.noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-988993754670474624.post-60323514628397428252018-07-17T19:36:50.127+03:002018-07-17T19:36:50.127+03:00Another awesome story Ms Jackie. But why do all th...Another awesome story Ms Jackie. But why do all the story lines require the principle person need to be drugged or coerced into serving as a maid. Couldn't a story be about a well to do young female, just out of uni. Traveling Europe and gets into trouble. Winds up working off her punishment with public humiliation, but eventually realizing that being a maid ain't such a bad thing?Maid lukashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01129086773955386489noreply@blogger.com